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A villanelle about my woeful existence under the thumbs of the evil ones (my first) |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion 
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I'm caught twixt Toe and Balladeer, I'm confused about where I'm at. Maybe I shouldn't have come in here? I'm constantly vilified by that old Toerag, (His boot's permanently fixed in my rear). And Suthern follows up to help him brag. Balladeer writes more subtlely clear, (I suspect he's a lover of cats). And, hence I've found I must live in fear. Iloveit shamelessly tips her hat, For the mean things I so often hear, From that ne'er do well scalawag. Look at my life, so helplessly drear, Each day seems to slothfully drag, Because I'm the target of Toe and ‘Deer. They take their shots, I'm often bagged, They revel in this sport, they appear To have more fun as my spirit's dragged Through the mud that's my life in here. ta daaaa - and I really don't feel this way - I just needed something to write about. I love 'em both. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
And they love you! LOL. And we all enjoy your poetic potshots... I mean... love fest! LOL (And by the way... I follow Toerag because I think heaven can't possibly be a finer sight for these eyes to feast upon... he usually "gets" you so good he doesn't need any help bragging! LOL) |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Belle And that's why I can never send you my peekshure. You'd dump that old broken down college professor so fast he'd think he had leprosy (sorry Toe, I knbow I promised not to tell Belle about your localized case of decaying flesh. Yanno, though, it WAS your idea to do a panty raid at the Leper Colony). |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Hilarious ... with a title like that, how could I not read it? Let's hear it for the "evil ones" and their diabolical crusade!!  Nocht ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Ummmm... Sailor, I hate to point out that your memory is as useless as the rest of you... but you HAVE sent me a peekshure or two of you... and I still prefer that gorgeous professor Toerag! *G* Which... considering lil Lor's preferences, is probably good for my continued health! LOL |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Awww, LongJohn. We never rag on anyone we don't care about so you can see we must love you to death!!!!! It would be a poorer place without you, for sure, but, if you insist on leavin', can Lorelei stay? Well, I've got pictures of both of you and you're fine specimens indeed. Ain't got one of Suthern 'cause she won't give me one and ain't got one of Toe, but I look at hundreds of roaches every day and how much difference can there be? Great poem....but no cigar on the villanelle part. |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
LJA: and no Rainbow in there..I'm pouting now...not to mention sulking..*g* HUSG ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Witty and funny Loved it!  ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Very funny,I also agree with Watcher...very witty Jenny |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Thank you one and all - 'Deer - how did I miss on the villanelle? Five verses of three lines each, a sixth verse of four lines, and only two rhymes. Are there some restrictions on the meter? |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
LJA, Out-standing , cudos , the total sum of erudite expression . Seriously , I loved it . |
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freespiritfem Junior Member
since 1999-10-07
Posts 49Cordova,Alabama,USA |
LOL..enjoyed it greatly!!! Very funny... ------------------ Paula Diane S. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
We just did a class on villanelle Sailor. The last two lines in your quatrain are to be repeated through the poem. Nice work all the same but not a villanelle. I love reading the ummmm battle of wits? ego? etc. You gentlemen never fail to amaze me with your talents. |
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