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redwriter1
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since 1999-07-22
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Franklin, TN

0 posted 1999-10-14 01:36 PM


The day he cryed
on my shoulder like a little boy
the tears burned my skin
and I held him as close as I could

Tightly, firmly, warmly
then gently held his head in my lap
and stroked his hair
saying "ssshhhhh"..

but I didn't really mean it

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Tara Simms
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1 posted 1999-10-14 02:24 PM


Very tender, Redwriter. I don't see you posting much these days.

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It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley
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redwriter1
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since 1999-07-22
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Franklin, TN
2 posted 1999-10-14 07:02 PM


Thank you for missing me

I've just been working on lyrics and songs and didn't want to bother the room (since it's not poetry, per say)



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Kay-lynn
**A dream is a wish your heart makes :)


hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
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Glen Hope, PA USA
3 posted 1999-10-14 08:28 PM


red.....this is really tender. I like to see a man cry, it tells me they feel. I for one se no difference between lyrics and poetry, please do share
Watcher666
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4 posted 1999-10-15 04:42 PM


Nicely done.I liked the feelings here.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

Balladeer
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5 posted 1999-10-15 05:46 PM


It's always good to see you, Red, no matter what style you're using. Welcome back.
Beki
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6 posted 1999-10-15 05:52 PM


I really liked this, until the last line...that such comfort would be false, especially for a man whose nature it is not to be so vulnerable. I have a friend, whom I was always close to but who became infinitely closer after I held him weeping in my arms at another friends' funeral. There is something about the bond that experience created that is very unique and special. Without the last line this poem could have been speaking of that.
redwriter1
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Franklin, TN
7 posted 1999-10-15 09:56 PM


Beki.. the point is..
when I said.. "shhhh".. (as in be quiet)
I really didn't mean it.. I didn't mean for him to be quiet..
It's an automatic nurturing response.

and thank you Balladeer.. nice to see you too.. (smile)

Denise
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8 posted 1999-10-16 07:33 PM


Beautiful! This is so sweet!

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Denise

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