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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN 
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The day he cryed on my shoulder like a little boy the tears burned my skin and I held him as close as I could Tightly, firmly, warmly then gently held his head in my lap and stroked his hair saying "ssshhhhh".. but I didn't really mean it |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Very tender, Redwriter. I don't see you posting much these days. ------------------ It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley Visit my poetry website: www.geocities.com/Paris/Musee/9954/ |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
Thank you for missing me  I've just been working on lyrics and songs and didn't want to bother the room (since it's not poetry, per say) ------------------ Kay-lynn **A dream is a wish your heart makes :) |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
red.....this is really tender. I like to see a man cry, it tells me they feel. I for one se no difference between lyrics and poetry, please do share |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Nicely done.I liked the feelings here. ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
It's always good to see you, Red, no matter what style you're using. Welcome back. |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
I really liked this, until the last line...that such comfort would be false, especially for a man whose nature it is not to be so vulnerable. I have a friend, whom I was always close to but who became infinitely closer after I held him weeping in my arms at another friends' funeral. There is something about the bond that experience created that is very unique and special. Without the last line this poem could have been speaking of that. |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
Beki.. the point is.. when I said.. "shhhh".. (as in be quiet) I really didn't mean it.. I didn't mean for him to be quiet.. It's an automatic nurturing response. and thank you Balladeer.. nice to see you too.. (smile) |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful! This is so sweet! ------------------ Denise |
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