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Pinocchio
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Pinocchio |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA 
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Pinocchio Like a puppet on a string, I lived; he my Geppetto, always in control. Everything guided by his moves, my life not my own. I could not feel. I could not cry. Heart inaccessible in my chest of wood. I spent my life on a shelf, looking down from above, wishing only to be real. I ran away one day, seeking freedom, but found myself in a world of lies that didn’t live up to my expectations at all. My wooden arms incapable of holding. My wooden heart unable to love. I hid in the circus of my mind, put myself on display in a freak show called Life, and dreamed of better things. You came to me like a fairy in my dreams, the reality of you unbelievable. “Grant me life,” I begged. “Let me live once more.” “Free me with your love.” I drifted back off to sleep and awoke, alive, in your arms. My wood is now flesh; I move without strings. ------------------ Man can not discover new oceans unless he has the courage to lose sight of the shore. [This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 10-10-1999).] |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
WOW! What creation! This is a marvellous transformation, Ruth.  |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Ruth, you know what I think of this wonderful work and what I think of the Lady who penned it. Well done, my friend. ------------------ Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Superb!  |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
Absolutely beautiful..your command of decriptive prose and metaphor is amazing. Wonderful! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Oh, Hoot, this is beautiful! I enjoyed reading this very much! ------------------ Denise |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Ruth, this is your best one yet! I love this, the imagery, the story. "I hid in the circus of my mind, put myself on display in a freak show called Life"--haven't we all felt that way from time to time? You just word it so well. "I move without strings"--that line says it ALL. Excellent job, Ruth! ------------------ It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley Visit my poetry website: www.geocities.com/Paris/Musee/9954/ |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Severn...thank you, the transformation in myself is perhaps my best creation to date Dream....thanks for your opinion and support on this one and for being such a dear friend PDV....thanks rascalx...wow, want to do up a critique for me for my book Thanks!denise...thank you Tara...you reply is so kind, thank you my friend |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I have no ready adjectives to use for this poem. Anything would sound too cheap and insufficient. I wish I had written it. Thank you, hoot. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wonderful telling of the power of love. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Another echo from my heart ruth, you are truly amazing! |
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Dragoness Senior Member
since 1999-08-07
Posts 513 |
Excellent! ------------------ Set you heart free and your mind will follow. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Balladeer...thank you, that says a lot Martie...thanks, love is a powerful thing as control is a destructive force Chris....amazing?? I think not, but thank you Dragoness....thank you |
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johnt300 Member
since 1999-09-12
Posts 214san diego, ca. |
Perfect. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hoot, this is Magnificent!!! loved it ------------------ What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Tyson and Dark angel, thank you both |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Hoot: Smiles here.. HUGS ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Excellent writing. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I have to ditto 'Deer and say that I wish I had thought up this one myself. I doubt I could have done the justice to it that you did, though. Well done, Hoot! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Rainbow and Mike, thank you very much Sunshine...give yourself a bit more credit, remember, I have seen your work |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
I don't know about this one Hoot, the whole idea of puppets is kind of getting worn out. I think you can do better than this. |
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U K Hero Member
since 1999-08-08
Posts 266England |
what a delightful way of putting it across. But then again, one wood woodent one when ones in love (just a pun ). I loved it... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Hoot, Every once in a while you surprise yourself with a poem you write and this is one of them It could'nt have been written better a Bravo and congrads. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Master...yes, quite possibly the puppet theme has been over done, but in all reality that's how I lived a better part of my life Uk...very punny thanksSeymore...thanks for the comment, yes, in fact this poem and the response it's gotten has surprised me, but each time I read it, and the wonderful comments by people like you, I get to like it a bit more ------------------ Man can not discover new oceans unless he has the courage to lose sight of the shore. [This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 10-12-1999).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
hoot: The poem is superb, the last line a powerful statement. We've all been blessed by you gaining control of your life and your poems... Well done!!! |
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Peter New Member
since 1999-10-12
Posts 2 |
Well Ruth, as usual, your words leave me in the clouds. "Exquisite" is to say the very least. ------------------ Peter |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Severn...thank you very much Peter how wonderful to see a dear friend in my favorite site, thank you and welcome to Passions |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Exceptional piece Hoot and one of my favorites of yours....this really touched me...... ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
hoot this is beautiful, I don't know what I could say that hasn't been said, but it is great. I have lived the first part of your poem, I hope I come out of it as beautifully as you have |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Well darn it, you didn't leave any room for me here! j/k What can I say really that hasn't already been said Ruth? So I will just ditto the above, like Bally says there, anything I say would seem insufficient. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Pepper....thank you very much for your kind words Iloveit...I'm sorry to hear you had to go through that also, it's not a place I'd like to be in again. I wish you the best of luck, just keep your dreams in sight and keep faith in yourself. May God Bless, Whtdove...thank you, you are a dear friend and a wonderful person |
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