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Scribe
Junior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 14
Capetown, South Africa

0 posted 1999-09-26 09:53 AM


Have you ever
tried to reach
the motionless
fragments of time
suspended within
the shattered crystal
of your heart?

have you ever
felt apathy embrace
you with surgical indifference
while tears dance
in anguished spasms
from your eyes
to your pillow
and soak warmly
into your hair?

have you ever
wandered, unseeing
into the quicksand
of your own doubt
and felt it suck you down
and choke you
and restrict the movement
of your weakened spirit?

have you ever
stood outside yourself
and watched
in futile anger
as the husk of your soul
performs the intricate
ballet of being
of seeming to be?

have you ever
poured everything
inside your soul
into the soul of another
and had it spat back at you
a venomous
sickly bile
no longer presentable
nor loveable
fit only to
be locked inside yourself?

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"just another lost child, trying to find my way"

© Copyright 1999 Scribe - All Rights Reserved
Tara Simms
Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244
Honea Path, SC USA
1 posted 1999-09-26 09:57 AM


Scribe, so sorry for your pain, but you shared it beautifully with this poem.

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Work like you don't need the money, love like it's never going to hurt, dance like nobody's watching.

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hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
2 posted 1999-09-26 10:00 AM


Wow.....this is a very emotional piece. You have expressed yourself well on this one. I think we've all felt this way from time to time

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Some people come into our lives and quickly go. Some stay for awhile and leave footprints in our heart and we are never ever the same.

Thank you all for leaving footprints!!

percent
New Member
since 1999-09-25
Posts 3
USA
3 posted 1999-09-26 01:49 PM


Scribe...we have the same write mind.
I'm feelin' your pieces.

Lost Dreamer
Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow
4 posted 1999-09-26 02:59 PM


Very well written, I really enjoyed the strength of emotion.
Scribe
Junior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 14
Capetown, South Africa
5 posted 1999-09-30 02:38 PM


thank you all for your kind replies to this piece of my soul ... i feel suitably welcomed

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"just another lost child, trying to find my way"

Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
6 posted 1999-09-30 05:16 PM


Yes.

Well done.

Iloveit
Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121
NM
7 posted 1999-09-30 05:19 PM


very well done, that verse on you soul seeming ot be, wow, haven't we all been there before, and if you haven't then you may count yourself lucky

really like this

Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

8 posted 1999-09-30 08:28 PM


Why, well yes I have. And you have described it so perfectly! Very well done!

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Denise

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