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Lost Dreamer
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Somewhere near the Rainbow

0 posted 1999-10-08 07:06 PM


Invincible Actions

Climbing a ladder
to beyond her brain
avoiding obstacles
without a moments disdain.

Reflection in mirror
wiggling finger hastily
as she escalates her being
further past an illusionary galaxy.

Invincible actions
leave her paralyzed in fright
as doctors reveal
the loss of sight.

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Martie
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1 posted 1999-10-08 08:15 PM


I had trouble grasping the meaning of this poem. I thought that you might be referring to some sort of brain surgery where the patient is still conscious and watching (referral to mirror and wiggling fingers).
Lost Dreamer
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2 posted 1999-10-08 10:04 PM


Martie, Sorry you did not understand, it's about someone partying to much, and becoming invincible, and tragedy happens. Thanks for reading, and commenting, hope it's more clear now.
hoot_owl_rn
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3 posted 1999-10-08 11:58 PM


with a teenage son, this hits hard.....amazing how invincable they think the are

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Man can not discover new oceans unless he has the courage to lose sight of the shore.

Lost Dreamer
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4 posted 1999-10-09 06:33 AM


Ruth, Teenagers become invincible because they think it's fun, they never think something terrible could happen. Problem is at times adults can be just as invincible, and they should know better. Thanks for reading, I pray your son stays safe.
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