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Dear Diary |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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DEAR DIARY Dear Diary, today I thought Of all in life that's went for naught. All I've striven for and strained, In thirty years seeming so preordained. With blackened clouds painting the sky. I swear I heard passing Death sigh. Still, victory lies unascertained. Dear Diary, today it rained. Dear Diary, today I wept At promises made to me, unkept. Idle hopes once held August, Flailing in tears of disgust. In sterility, finding fruition, To the merriment of remission. Ashes to ashes, dust to dust, Dear Diary, today I buried trust. Dear Diary, last night I dreamed And all the stars of heaven gleamed. But I awoke to dismal overcast, The gray day draped over my mood fast. So I walked the world in black and white. Against twisted Fate's hands of sleight. Against Time, itself, slow and steadfast, Dear Diary, Today I faced my past. Dear Diary, I'd sell my soul To fill the emptiness of this "whole". Douse the shenanigan of charade, With unbridled passion on parade. To know love is true, if just one night, I'd forego all I know to be good or right. To the neglect of love, never made, Dear Diary, today's the price I've paid. Through the blistered sight of a kaleidoscope, Dear Diary, tomorrow I hope... ------------------ Michael Anderson And so, being young and dipt in folly I fell in love with melancholy, But dreams - of those who dream as I, Aspiringly, are damned, and die: EAP |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Michael, Michael, Michael, this is magnificent. A masterpiece. ------------------ Denise |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Impressive as always... |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
MIchael, I don't know what brought this poem on but, whatever it was, it appears to be bad for you but what a thing of beauty it has produced in this writing. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Michael, I agree with all the above comments, A wonderful piece of work. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Odd is it not that many revel in the fruits of one's misfortune. ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
What else can I say, Michael? Ditto, and amen ------------------ I look forward to tomorrow, while looking back on the past. But today is the day I am living. And I expect it to be a great day! |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
Michael.. ? could you maybe re-write this in your own words? Instead of the "poetic" ones. I have a feeling you may get your point across much more truthfully. Just a thought. (big words do not a poet make) and this is lovely but it seems your words are weighing down your feelings. (does that make sense?) ------------------ Kay-lynn **A dream is a wish your heart makes :) |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I think your work is wonderful. As is. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Beautiful Michael (SIGH), how come my diary and journals never look as good as yours?????  ------------------ Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing... ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Well, I didn't have a problem at all with this form. It was sadly beautiful...and I could feel the sadness in your words. No dictionary needed. Wonderful work. |
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Lynn Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 316Jasper, Alabama U.S.A. |
Michael...Beautiful poem. I liked it a lot. Great job.... |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
redwriter1, Forgive me if I sound offended, but I am. For you to imply that these are not my own words - or that I could get my point across more "truthfully" I take as an insult. My poetry is my passion. It is my stream of emotion put into verse. I can personally assure I am spending no time scurrying through dictionaries looking up "Big Words" as you say. For that matter, I am really wondering which words you see as BIG...kaleidoscope? - it's a child's toy. You say my words are weighing down my feelings, I can assure you it's the other way around. These are my words, straight from my soul, you don't have to like them but do not question that they are mine and do not question that they are of genuine emotion. I am sorry if they seemed over your head in some way but no, there wil not be a rewrite. Everyone else, I give you thanks you for your comments. Michael |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
This was both poignant and truthful ... I did not at all find it pretensious or forced. Poetry is both your passion and your talent, Michael. Very well written. Nocht ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die." |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Again, I find myself awed at the way you can take something so mundane and everyday and turn it into a thing of beauty. Amazing! Being the outspoken and opinionated person that you well know I am, I will do my utmost to exercise restraint in stating the following: I am deeply offended that anyone would suggest that your poetry was anything but sincere. In my humble opinion, this makes a much bolder statement in verse than it ever could in prose. (Judiciously biting back the rest!) --Kess ------------------ You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
I stand in awe as always. Excellent! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Michael another excellent work you have crafted with your pen and your writers mind....do now take your bow for this one |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This was beautiful and so well written. I could tell that it came straight from the heart....and to the reply you gave, I say touche'. |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Michael, To not repeat the course of positive responses here would be difficult for they are all right on the mark describing your brilliant talent. You are a man who can reach so deeply into your heart and pull out the most moving words to make a masterpiece come to life. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Yanno, I'm gettin' to hate you almost as much as I do Balladeer! All these damn talented people running around here are starting to get on my nerves! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I usually find my vocabulary fairly extensive (or at least sufficient for my needs *S*)... but right now, I'm reduced to "wow!" Painful, powerful, poignant... wonderful work, Michael! |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Michael: At least your diary says something interesting, I'm sure mine would probably read "Not tonight Josephine"... Seriously: In touch with your emotions as always.. HUSG ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Lovely piece Michael, I can relate! I am also totally envious! What a poetic mouthful you produced!  As always wonderful in flow and rhythm! *taking notes*Luv X ------------------ "We have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night" (Tombstone epitaph of two amateur astronomers) |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Absolutely exquisite Michael, and VERY evident that it came from the heart.... I am also in awe of your talent Sir. ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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Mary Junior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 38Delaware, Ohio, USA |
I don't know what to say here Michael...all of my words have been taken. I ditto all of the above (excluding one). You are a talent, and I thank you for sharing! Keep up the great work!! |
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Richard 33 Member
since 1999-09-09
Posts 187glen easton, wv usa |
Michael: I see what you are saying, very clearly,I might add, It's my emotion's, and passions that make me creative. Echo's statement is so true, writting to know we are alive. Michael that is what make us all so special, we take our good times, sad times, bad times, anger, joy, tradgies, and time of triuph, and use them as our fuel, to create these wonderful works, Thank you michael, for the insiration you give us, keep on doing what you do!!!!!! Richard Allen Baker [This message has been edited by Richard 33 (edited 11-09-1999).] |
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Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Thank you, Richard, those words mean much to me. I will keep on trudging along I'm sure. Thank you everyone else, I surely didn't expect this type of response on this poem. I am flattered to say the least. Michael |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Here comes Marilyn....pulling up the rear..*sigh*. There isn't a Bravo that I could say that wouldn't sound trite at the moment Dark Lord. I will just bow to your greatness as my response. Excellent Sir. |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
Michael do you have any publications? I think you should write a book =) love this one |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
incredibly sadly beautiful |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I'm even more impressed now than I was then. Magnificent!!! |
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