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Snorting and Snuffling |
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broker6 Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 132Bellevue, NE, Sarpy |
Snortling and Snuffling by © Richard Budig 1996 Beware. The beast of the night Is loose again. If you listen, You may hear him Snortling through the shadows, Snuffling beneath your window In the dry leaves that gather Like all your lost homework papers. And if you go on creeping toe, And hold your breath Until you see stars in your head, And peer into that pool of light That puddles in the dark below, You may catch the glint of his eye As he roots among your secrets With spiky things sticking up, And little ears that twitch, And something that grinds Against the bricks of your house, Down there, Just where The basement begins. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is ssooooooooo spooky! I love it! ------------------ Denise |
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Critic New Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 9 |
Critic, if you ever have something useful to say about this poem, we'll be happy to hear it... (Ron) [This message has been edited by rcarnell (edited 11-09-1999).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Good job, Broker... some great images! |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Bit chilling...loved it! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Too bad the "critic" doesn't post except to critique?....Then maybe we could all be critics?....Maybe ya should be the moderator for the Critical Analysis board? BTW....what's "attemp?"....... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Broker: None of us know who the Critic is because they decline to leave a legitimate email address.... only the occasional snide comment. Please don't judge us all by such rudeness. |
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U K Hero Member
since 1999-08-08
Posts 266England |
I like this, its not meant to rhyme (poetry does not have to) and your choice of style for this piece is ok. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Very Well Done Broker...as Denise said it is very spooky. I like your style..... ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Hey Richard!!!! You made it here!!! I told you they were the best bunch online!!! Robert Great poem. I look forward to seeing more of your work. Of course it didn't scare me...only girls would be scared of that ol' thing. :-} ------------------ if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. [This message has been edited by RobertB (edited 11-08-1999).] |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Welcome Richard! Excellent choice for a title, and I enjoyed the read, too! Looking forward to reading more of your work.  Oh and don't give another thought to The Critic. We never do! ------------------ "Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
cool! |
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