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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland 
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Always on the outside looking in, I see the darkness bare it's teeth and grin, Can't hear the calls over the din, My pain it dwells within. Stuck in the abyss, The key to freedom a kiss, Longing to be cocooned in bliss, Can't see an end to this. Darkness hemming in on me, Arms of terror are smothering me, Is this how it's meant to be? Is this all that's left of we? Drowning in pain, No way to reach the shore, Nothing but disdain Give me strength to fight once more. Locked in the padded white cell, Nowhere happy for my heart to dwell, Tears I've cried could fill a well, Could some sorceress end this spell? Barbaric emotional torture, Too much pain to endure, I need to find a cure, My heart longs to be pure once more. I beg you put an end to my pain, There was nothing for you to gain, I pray some happiness and laughter remain, Don't make me live this way again. ------------------ Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing... ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) [This message has been edited by Isis (edited 11-03-1999).] |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
I like this a lot Isis, just have two typos you might want to fix....the first one is in the second stanza..the last line you wrote; Can't see and end to this...Is it just me or should it be Can't see AN end to this not AND? And the other one is the second to last stanza....the third line; I nned to find a cure....I believe your nned should be need  That is all I found, other than that I liked this a lot! Very well done! 2 more thumbs up! ------------------ ~*~ Time erases and rewrites all the lines. What remains is the poetry! ~*~ |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Hate that lost feeling,and knowing only time will help it pass.If happiness were mine to give you'd have it. *Hugs*  ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Thanks Echo all fixed!! Glad you liked it.Thanks Watcher I know you would if you could hon. Thanks ------------------ Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing... ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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aaron sanchez New Member
since 1999-11-02
Posts 7N/A |
wow! good writing. i like it isis. you have a very good style. |
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Lynn Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 316Jasper, Alabama U.S.A. |
Isis...liked it a lot....(HUGS) & 's |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Very heartfelt poem..... dear Isis, I hope the pain you are suffering now is short lived. ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extrordinaire! |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
People are responding and posting to my 'Darkness' topic but I can't read them, so thanks whoever you are ------------------ Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing... ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Isis, Just want to let you know I read your work and want to say be happy. Don't dwell on what cannot be, only on what can. Liked the poem. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
I still can't read my replies  ------------------ Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing... ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very well done, Isis. And I agree with Seymour! True words of wisdom! ------------------ Denise |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Thanks one all, I do try not to dwell, But sometimes my grief Is as bottomless as well. But I keep a stiff upper lip, Most of the time at least, For if I gave in to these tremors, My soul would surely cease ------------------ Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing... ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I can feel this deeply |
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