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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa 
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last night so brief, that moment still, I found a small perfection, for years I looked, without a trace, to find in your complexion, a little piece of happiness, your smile can only bring, but as you lied there next to me, your eyes said not a thing. why is it when you want something, its never yours to own, why is it when you love someone, you always feel alone, you’ll never see me as I am, and probably just as well, for words don’t seem to hurt as much, when there’s nothing left to tell. ------------------ love hurts |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Liked this, but might I suggest a few different line breaks. Separte lines instead of the comma's.  ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
yeah i can never tell what to do there, thanks for the suggestion, all my poems look like this |
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