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Kevin
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0 posted 1999-11-02 01:28 AM


last night so brief, that moment still, I found a small perfection,
for years I looked, without a trace, to find in your complexion,
a little piece of happiness, your smile can only bring,
but as you lied there next to me, your eyes said not a thing.
why is it when you want something, its never yours to own,
why is it when you love someone, you always feel alone,
you’ll never see me as I am, and probably just as well,
for words don’t seem to hurt as much, when there’s nothing left to tell.


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love hurts

© Copyright 1999 Kevin Bednarz - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 1999-11-02 01:30 AM


Liked this, but might I suggest a few different line breaks. Separte lines instead of the comma's.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

Kevin
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2 posted 1999-11-02 01:32 AM


yeah i can never tell what to do there, thanks for the suggestion, all my poems look like this

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