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Love at first sight
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Love at first sight |
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luckygirl New Member
since 1999-10-02
Posts 1England |
I smiled, and blushed He came over, I began to feel flushed I took a deep breath, he was coming nearer It was love at first sight, I swear I tried to look away but my eyes were glued They were glued to this incredible human being - this gorgeous guy He ran his fingers through his hair, I began to stare It was love at first sight, I swear I took a step back to admire this man, Trying not to stare too much, but it was impossible I smiled again, and moved uneasily As he came over and stuck his arm out He reached out and placed his hand on my shoulder, smiled at me then said "excuse me miss, you're standing infront of my locker" I flinched at myself, then ran..why doesn't love at first sight happen to me? ------------------ Kayley Gladwin |
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desperado Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 312FT Hood,Tx |
hehe ahh the school girl mentality in wonderful exhibit. great ending, although I'm not sure whether you wanted it to rhyme or not all the way through. it was a little disjunctured in the rhyme department and rhythm was also a little erratic at times. other than that though I'm surprised that it got this far without someone else posting. keep it up. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
very cute......enjoyed the read luckygirl...... ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Surprise ending! I liked that! Don't feel alone luckygirl! We've all been there! (I think!)  ------------------ Denise |
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