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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL 
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All Hallows Eve Participants Participants in a memoriam masked In gaiety the celebrants basked Unknowingly outwitted To the darkness committed In gaiety the celebrants basked Participants though no one ever had asked To the darkness committed By the costumes outfitted Participants though no one ever had asked Whose funeral procession filed past By the costumes outfitted They are never acquitted Whose funeral procession filed past? Participants in the unholiest of Pasch They are never acquitted From the blackness emitted Participants in the unholiest of Pasch In a celebration to duty they are tasked From the blackness emitted No light can be transmitted In a celebration to duty they are tasked Unknowingly outwitted No light can be transmitted Participants in a memoriam masked. RB ------------------ if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. [This message has been edited by RobertB (edited 10-29-1999).] |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
This is really great Robert. But there is no break between the quartains. It makes it very difficult to read. It has an excellent theme soul brother. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent piece of writing Robert! ------------------ Denise |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Much better Robert. Your meter is off...but I know you are not a syllable counter..lol...great work my friend. |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
my meter is off???? darn I thought I counted them all! ------------------ if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
well you challenged yourself to do something different, for that you get an A! I thought you did a fine job! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
One word...WOW!! |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
I enjoyed this much Robert..... ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extrordinaire! |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Awesome, and I think appropriate today to bring back up! BTW_ I liked the repeated rhyme! |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Robert, well done ! : ) |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Awesome!! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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