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The Path of Darkness (edited) |
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Blackdrake Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 83Depends on the day :) |
Here upon the grass In this medow that i stand Agreat battle was fought by two kings Whom thought to own the land The kings and the officers Were the only to excape The thoughtless slaughter of thousands Who shared this dis-honorable fate The two kings lives were plauged By the visions of that day For the death they caused With their souls they will pay The firtile green grass was died red By the bodies of the men who fell here Grass grows red to mark the path of death And is keept empty by the ominous fear The red medow within the moutain pass Has long since been named It is the lightless vale, the place of death And is a place of great fear and dread Within the un-natural wind that plauges this place of death, The lost souls of the tortured solgers reside Replaying the epic battle To which each owes their demise Only thoes of pure soul With no malace, greed, or hate May pss through the lightless vale or forever seal their fate The kings whom fought this battle , the leaders in this tale Have long since been put to rest They jooined the eternal battle within the lightless vale Both destened to fight forever , but neither will preveil Important lessons have been learned By the new kings upon the throne Only love, and peace may reside Greed, hate and chaos are condoned And so here ends this tale From which you must now learn From greed, hate, and chaos Your soal will forever burn ©BLACKDRAKE ------------------ Thy own Darkness shall conquer the Light |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
That was a really neat story. You put a lot of thought into it I could feel it. One small and well meaning suggestion...you need to check spelling. If you use MSWord it will do it for you. I love that. I was a good speller about 30 years ago. Nice read though. ------------------ if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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Blackdrake Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 83Depends on the day :) |
Thank you for the advice. Ill try to get the spelling corrected asap. ------------------ Thy own Darkness shall conquer the Light |
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Ominous Member
since 1999-07-04
Posts 68Canada |
Well done brother. You truly are getting better with each new poem. Keep it up |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Indeed, still do I like this tale.  ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Enjoyed the read.Well done! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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