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Dance of Darkness
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Dance of Darkness |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Cruel words once spoken can't return Again from whence they came Hot ember's spark ignites the burn -Eternal is the flame. Fierce tongues in haste have daggers flung Sure causing hearts to bleed Pernicious ways have souls sore stung -Fulfilling vain dark need. Loud silence deep doth volumes speak When muteness shouts its spite It screams that one's a dastard weak -Who chooses thus to fight. A character devoid of grace Soul shrouded in black night A dismal void's your dwelling place -Such is the coward's plight. So dance with Evil, have your fun Enjoy it to the max A day will come when it's undone -When Light gives Dark the facts. ....ooops, just read in my Webster's that personification is supposed to be capitalized! ...sorry ------------------ Denise [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 10-30-1999).] [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 10-30-1999).] |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Methinks that the Dark does like you well.  ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
"A dismal void's your dwelling place" indeed! Very excellent, Denise. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Some excellent lines and thoughts contained herein Denise.... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Denise, Well done and a keeper. The rhyme is perfect. |
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Julie Jordan Scott Member
since 1999-09-19
Posts 146Bakersfield, CA USA |
Wonderfully spoken sentiment that is altogether too common. Thanks for sharing! |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
WOW! Exciting read! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Great piece Denise......the last two lines say much... ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extrordinaire! |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Words of wisdom my friend. Great job ------------------ How long after you are gone will ripples remain as evidence that you were cast into the pool? ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
AN EXCELLENT POEM BESTOWED UPON US ALL! KEEP YOUR OPEN MINDED HONESTY IF NOT ONLY FOR MY ENJOYMENT...GREAT JOB! |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wonderful message, Denise, indeed that day will not come soon enough. ------------------ Michael Anderson Is all that we see or seem but a dream within a dream? |
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Julie Senior Member
since 1999-08-20
Posts 739Houston, TX |
Well spoken and described of the dark side. |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
What can I say, D? This is one of the best I've read. Who is your darkness, hmmm? ------------------ Once I was brilliant, now I no longer shine, but the twinkle in my eye speaks of another time. |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thank you all for your wonderful responses! It means alot to me that you take the time to read and comment on my work! Dream- If you're referring to yourself, thank you! Balladeer- I'm glad that line spoke to you...for some reason it was the hardest to get right and the last line that I completed. Mike- Missed ya boy, where ya been?! Pepper- My favorite line! Glad you liked it too! Michael- Amen! RS- Nobody I know personally! Thanks again everybody! ------------------ Denise |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Denise, This was a great one and the first of yours that I've read (been away a while). Dynamite meter and rhyme sandman |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Fred and Marlene, thank you for your kind comments. I also enjoy reading your work! ------------------ Denise |
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Rico Junior Member
since 1999-10-29
Posts 20 |
How could I not tell this is great!?! |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
This was wonderfully written -- I enjoyed the read. --Kess ------------------ You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Very well done and thoughtful Denise! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Applause to you Denise on an excellent job. |
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Blackdrake Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 83Depends on the day :) |
Denise Excellent. Love your work. On the path of darkness, there are those that lead , and and those that follow. I do belive You lead. ------------------ Thy own Darkness shall conquer the Light |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
I hate it when it gets dark , I usually end up blundering into a tree with my antlers. Great read d. , keep 'em comin |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Rico, Martie, Skyfyre, WhtDove, Blackdrake and DrMoose, Thank you all for reading and commenting! It is appreciated! DrMoose....ouch! That must hurt! Blackdrake- Thanks to you also for reading and commenting. I think perhaps you misunderstand this piece though if you say I am a leader on the path of darkness? 'Tis certainly not the intent of this piece or my life! But, again, thanks for your input! ------------------ Denise |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Lady D: Well said! I like that last line... a nice turn. Thanks for sharing. |
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Emmy Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 194KY |
WOW, this was truly impressive. A wonderfully uncloaking of the dark side... |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thank you, Andrew and Emmy for reading and commenting. I'm glad that you enjoyed it! ------------------ Denise |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
keep looking for the night lite.. that's what I try to do. Excellent verse. I'm impressed.. |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thanks redwriter! *LOL* nite-lites are great! ------------------ Denise |
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H. Arlequin Member
since 1999-08-23
Posts 210 |
one of your best, Denise smoooooooches HA |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wow, thanks H.A.! So glad you think so! ------------------ Denise |
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