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Acrostic Sestina 2 (Challenge from Christopher)
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Acrostic Sestina 2 (Challenge from Christopher) |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio 
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This is my second, more serious attempt....with added bonus!!! RHYME!!!  Two Formed as One I know my love for you, at last Within my heart forever true. In dreams you’ve always come to me, Like calming winds of mem’ries past. Love softly finds it’s way to you To capture what is meant to be. Remain in truth of what will be, Embrace this strength and make it last. As life engulfs its time with you, Surrender to this love so true. Unspoken passion from the past, Reveal your feelings now of me. Evoke these dreams you’ve brought to me. Yesterday simply can not be! Over throw those thoughts of the past, Undying love is ours at last! For hearts tell tales of wishes true, Oh love, my soul belongs with you. Reach for those stars I’d give to you, Ask naught of what you give to me. Loosened heartstrings, oh yes, it’s true. Look to the future, what will be. Envisage time, for it will last, Tormented lovers now in past. Erelong, there will not be this past. Regard now what I say to you... Negate false thoughts that this won’t last. Intrigue the night, come follow me To a place where we’ll finally be Yielding never more, my love true. Melodic forces forming true, You cast aside fears of the past, Of silent question, “What will be?” Now strong, I stand here right with you, Enraptured by your stance with me. Love formed two souls as one at last. Ordained it’s true, both me and you… Victors of our past. Now with me, Each day will be, one more to last. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
OH! It's a poem type?....I thought maybe an Acrostic Sestina was some kinda medical condition? Yanno, I just now completed "Mary Had A Little Lamb" 101 and have so much to learn, (obviously)....this was great Sal...takes alot of thought and ability! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
ABsolutely incredible, Sally. A beautiful piece of work....and to create such a long acrostic....wow! |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
WOW! Beautifully done! Liked this much. ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
An acrostic sestina that rhymes! VERY EXCELLENT! ------------------ Denise |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Deep in the forest where there are many things un-spoken there is a word for poems such as this .... WOW! |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Ok.....this is just too much....Chris outdid himself with the acrostic sestina....and you even exceeded that with the addition of rhyme....congratulations-this is quite impressive indeed! ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
(grumbling...) You weren't supposed to outdo me!!! But you did, a magnificent job and a challenge well met! I honestly didn't expect you to do it, much less so quickly, and much much less, to make it rhyme!!! (going back to drawing board...) |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
My dear Toe, I'm sure you could teach me a few things....LOL Thank you. Mike, To get an incredible and a wow from you at the same time must mean I've finally done something right!  Thank you, darlin'. Watcher, Denise, Dr. Moose and Sys. Decay... Thank you all from the bottom of my heart. Your encouraging words mean a great deal...more than you could know. Christopher, I was not setting out on this journey with thoughts of "out-doing" you or any of the other fine poets in our poetry home. I truly appreciate the compliments...Thank you, kind sir. Oh..and one more thing....DON'T CHALLENGE ME AGAIN! LOL (j/k) What a task! WHEW! |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Hey Chris, you get more competition evry dat, don't you. Fabulous work, Sally. this was exceptional. ------------------ Michael Anderson Is all that we see or seem but a dream within a dream? |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Enjoyed very much, Sally... well done! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Sally, As I said in CA, my hat's off to you! |
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