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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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Take my hand when my eyes weep. Hold me gently in your arms. Finger my curls, as I sleep. Dazzle me with all your charm. Provide me time and space. Listen closely when I speak. Secure in your life my place. Support me the times I'm weak. Cherish our time together. Dread any time we're apart. Mean when you say forever. Let my absence gnaw your heart. And let all my joys be yours. Let my sorrows be as well. And share relationship chores. Mind your ego lest it swell. And I beg you never fight. Let us walk our time in peace. With a kiss for every night, Let our passions never cease. But above all these my dove, Swear always that you'll be true. For's not you I ask these of... They're my promises to you. [This message has been edited by Christopher (edited 10-29-1999).] |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
So beautiful!! Wolf Pup you did very well here.....very well indeed little brother! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Romance is still abloom for you I see my friend. Enjoy the ride. ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
And what a beautiful promise it is! |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Love the last verse, Christopher. This piece is very well written. I do not give out idle praise. This piece is a beauty. ------------------ No matter where you go, somebody's probably already been there and gotten the parking space... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Beautifully written Christopher.....such sincere requirements and what we all can only hope for  |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Another really nice tribute to your young lass - - I really like the form/style you used on this one...it displays nicely centered too, like you did...BRAVO! Your old heart does sing quite nicely when you're in love, dear Chris! LOL  ------------------ ~~ Lift your head high - spread your "words" and fly - - poetFemmeFatale |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
So sweet, Chris. The last stanza really pulls it together. (sigh) If only there was more love in this dismal world..... ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Wow...you leave me speechless, love. You leave me so lost in the beauty of your words. And that you know my mind so well, as I know yours. Every line...wow, just shaking head in happiness and wonderment.  miss you... |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
This brought a to my face. Love has a way of melting even the most stubborn of hearts (and I mean mine not yours!).--Kess |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Chris, a wonderful poem...as usual, and a lovely tribute. One line I would change though: For s'not you I ask these of... to For's not you I ask these of... Kinda had me scratchin' my nose, ya know, with that one...hehe. ------------------ Michael Anderson Is all that we see or seem but a dream within a dream? |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
ROFLMAO... please add a "me, too" to Michael's request... that nose thing isn't quite an appropriate response to such a lovely poem! *G* |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Christopher, Chris, Chris, Chris!!! WOW! I LOVE IT!!!! What can I say? I have no words to describe what I think. Fantastic won't cut it my friend!! This is a keeper for sure! Who said you could look inside my heart and see what I was thinking? eh? Absolutely fantastic! ENCORE!!!!! My God, this is exactly what I've been trying to get across for years now! Thank You! BIG HUGS! pssst, please do change the snot thing. hehe [This message has been edited by WhtDove (edited 10-28-1999).] |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This one almost got by me. Excellent work, Christopher. |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
You all are too amazing for me! (wink) thanks sis! Scott- enjoying every moment of it that isn't filled with the sorrow of being apart! Ohme- Thank you for reading! RSEvans- Thank you, I would much rather recieve honest criticism rather than false praise! Hoot- Just remember that you have to share them as well as recieve them! G- Thank you...I think. Are you trying to say my heart doesn't sing well when I'm not in love??? Amy- I think that in order to find love...first we must love K- echo my mirror Sky- Ahh, 'tis a glad thing to hear..but worry not...I too have a stubborn heart...just doesn't look like it anymore! Michael- S'not a problem! (LOL...I didn't notice it until you pointed it out! Thank you! )Suthern- still groaning and wiping my nose...LOL WhtDove- Thank you as well....I'm just glad to hear that someone else has thought the same way. In truth, most of my happiness is derived from the joy of others. I am happy when others are smiling. S'not much to ask, but for some reason, not everyone understands it! Balladeer- Naw...you're too quick to let anything pass you by!!! Thank you sir! Once again, thank you everyone, you are too kind, and I am (almost ) humbled! |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Sooooooooooooooooo beautiful Chris!! I always get so jealous when I read your loving words from the heart!! Great job, I shall take a copy of this too. ------------------ How long after you are gone will ripples remain as evidence that you were cast into the pool? ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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