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The Child |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
A little blonde girl smiles She is charming, if not cute She talks to strangers and beguiles She's always ready to dispute She is charming if not cute With her hair cut like a boy She's always ready to dispute All this child's known is joy With her hair cut like a boy She's certainly not a beauty All this child's known is joy Playing with no sense of duty She's certainly not a beauty Though at this young age, she's worry-free Playing with no sesne of duty She'll acquire one soon, definitely Though at this young age, she's worry-free Dreaming with not a shadowed thought She'll acquire some soon, definitely Looking back, it was all for naught Dreaming with not a shadowed thought She talks to starngers and beguiles Looking back, it was all for naught A little blonde girl smiles ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Well done! Liked this much! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
SD, I like this style. Wish I could do it. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Hmmmm.... youth waisted on the young? Not sure if that's the message or not, but I enjoyed the read. I hope the little girl is still smiling.  |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Ah, SD ! Another pantoum ! Well done ! I enjoyed it a lot ! |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Well done S D! Enjoyed this much. ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extrordinaire! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I liked this one a lot |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Thank you everyone, for replies. I'm sure you all know the goofy smile that forms on your face when you go into a forum to see yours near the top....  Andrew, this is a depiction of my early childhood. Basically saying that I was so happy, outgoing, perhaps argumentitive and hard-headed, full of laughter and life.... but that it doesn't matter, it was all for nothing, because I was changed anyway. ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
SD...very nice read gal....but now that you've grown, don't ya think ya should get rid of that training bra? They do have those inserts/plastic surgery/falsies...even toilet paper wadded up works yanno? |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Nice work! Another Pantoum, eh? Boy, oh boy...I still have a lot of work to do. LOL |
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H. Arlequin Member
since 1999-08-23
Posts 210 |
HA applauds! |
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suicidal dreams Member
since 1999-09-28
Posts 343Toledo Ohio USA |
Amy even though you have changed your a great and beutiful person and if you hadnt changed just think youdve never met me or kevin or everyone else. ------------------ life is short kill quick |
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