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Open Poetry #3

Help!!!!

Trynete
Junior Member

since 1999-09-01

Posts 35
Cape Cod, MA

0 posted 1999-10-22 12:08 PM

I have NO idea what to title this or how to end it, please pleeeeeeeeeeeaze can some1 help me??!!!!?

I have eyes,
but I cannot see.
I have a heart,
but it does bleed.
I have a pulse,
but it does not beat.
I have hands,
but I cannot touch.
I have legs,
but I cannot walk.
I have a tongue,
but I cannot talk.
I have ears,
but I cannot hear.
I have tears,
but I cannot cry.
I have a mouth,
but I cannot eat.
I have a nose,
but I cannot breathe.
I have a mind,
but I do not understand.

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To live is to love, and to love is to live... the meaning of life.

Systematic Decay
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

1 posted 1999-10-22 01:45 PM

I can't think of any good titles. However,I think the ending was fine just the way it is.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

Watcher666
Senior Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 1606

2 posted 1999-10-22 03:23 PM

I agree with Sys....ends well,but can't help with a title

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

Marilyn
Member Elite

since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

3 posted 1999-10-22 03:50 PM

I too think it ends fine. As for a title...Can Not....or I Have.

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

4 posted 1999-10-22 09:13 PM

Hey, my special friend - How about "I Have Not..."?

[This message has been edited by Nan (edited 10-22-1999).]

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