»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #1
»
Portraits
| Open Poetry #1 |
|
Portraits |
|
|
Franni Junior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 39 |
Your portrait belongs in my hallway In line with my father In his beaver top hat, Brocaded vest and frock coat, Holding his gold Dubie pocket watch Looking prosperous, Before he lost the mine at Silverton. Your portrait belongs in my hallway Beside my mother in The chestnut oval frame. She looks like me in brown taffeta, Her hoop skirt allowing a glimpse of Her gold kid high button dancing shoes, Worn the day she had the stroke And lost the use of her legs. She is holding a book she read to me About a prince in a fairy tale And I want her to know You did come riding by So late... But you came. Your portrait belongs in my hallway Next to mine So all will someday see How the flash caught you Caught me Smiling like Sunday's children Suspended in a time When we were all winning. |
||
| © Copyright 1999 Franni - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
JANNA Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 51arlington, tx usa |
Very emotional and sweet! I really like this one, I can't wait to read more. |
||
|
Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Franni - We are truly honored that you've joined us... This poem is extremely well written and exudes love and sincerity. - I, in particular, am looking forward to seeing lots more of your work... Wecome Aboard!!  [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 07-02-99).] |
||
|
Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family! This poem feels like it should be printed on parchment paper, framed and hung in that same hallway! And your story has a moral - someday your prince will come - even if you have to wait a bit for him!  |
||
|
Red Letter Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 85Allentown, PA |
The last two stanzas really tied things up nicely ... Very sweet. Red |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||