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A message on the wind
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A message on the wind |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England 
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Wind, blow across the ocean Fly swiftly over land And take for me this message I know she'll understand A message for my true love Reminding her I care And though my body's absent My thoughts are always there If you cannot find her Ask your friend the sun Say that you are seeking The other half of one When you find my darling Blow a kiss from me And tell her once the waiting's through We'll be forever free Remind her of a pledge we made A pledge I still hold dear A promise that will matter For all time and a year And tell her we're together Even when apart For at the beach in February We joined souls and hearts |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Nicely done. I particularly enjoyed the third stanza. |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Very nice, I really liked it. |
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ac Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 129Cayey, PR - USA |
Beautiful work...welcome... |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
lovely.....hope you will be posting more?  ------------------ Childhood Memories...your countenance...hoarse whispers...My One and Only...Tribute to M.J... serving wench...stolen hours...devotion...Master...apart... |
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azblond Senior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 637The Steamy Desert |
Sigh...How wonderful this message, I hope it reaches her and touches her heart as deeply as it touched mine! ------------------ For sometimes when the Darkness falls, we must surrender, take what is ours, and give what we can, and always remember love is somewhere waiting... |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Ah, I loved how your thoughts just clicked out so nicely especially in the first part of this....everything had such a nice rhythm...and wow your thoughts were beautiful!! ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Yeah it's me, back here in the "dark dusty corners" of the forum....doing a bit of post summer cleaning, and I'm finding the most beautiful gems among the spider webs......hhmmmm....This is absolutely a lover's treasure....ENJOY ! To all who missed it the first time, here is ERIC ! ------------------ I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
I love this! It is simple, yet eloquent. Really speaks to the heart. ------------------ |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Yet another reason to look through the archives and find what's been buried there...Hope she liked this one, Eric! ------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." |
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