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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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Lisa your so good to me I wish that you were here Keep you quiet company And always lend an ear You promised that you'd hold me And never let me go You never should have told me Cause now i have to know Lisa I know you inspired This sleepy autumn day I wont let our love grow tired Soon I'll be on my way |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
This has very good rhyme and meter. Hope that Lisa enjoyed this! |
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Gentle Soul Member
since 1999-07-12
Posts 273Vinton,Ohio USA |
I like.. its sweet, and sounds nice too! hehe ------------------ Gënt£ë¤§°û£ |
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Delores Hall Member
since 1999-07-16
Posts 342USA |
Very touching. |
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Angel_of_Music Junior Member
since 1999-07-25
Posts 35Sanger, TX USA |
nice ------------------ "In sleep he sang to me...in dreams he came...that voice which calls to me, and speaks my name..." |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Walt Very nicely ambivalent - each time I read it I saw a different perspective, the first time, it appeared you were leaving her, the next you were coming to her - it made me stop and really read it - and that's what poetry is all about. Nice job! |
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