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sig New Member
since 1999-06-12
Posts 6Fayetteville, nc, usa |
I read a story, I dreamed a dream, My present consciousness is not keen. What others think I take great care, To ponder about their life's despair. Who am I to think on my own Against the religious dogmatic tone. Can I believe the stories I read Or the dreams that I breed? Is sin for me sin for all Brotherhoods departed fall. Joined in life here and now Condemned to die; death so foul. I read a story, I dreamed a dream I'm torn in two, seam from seam. Pulled one way, lead another My decision; someone's blunder. I've lost my compuss, can't hear my call...Where in life's lot do I fall? Humanity joined togeather as one, How can I know the incarnate Son? [This message has been edited by sig (edited 06-13-99).] |
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Red Letter Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 85Allentown, PA |
This has such an excellent message and I really enjoyed the way you presented it... I have faced the same questions many times myself. My only suggestion would be to run your stuff through spell-check (mispellings or typos are often oversights but tend to be distracting to the reader). BTW, it should be "Veil" not "Vail", unless you are talking about the Colorado city...  Otherwise, a powerful read! |
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teenpoet Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 280Michigan |
Very nice, and it's good. You spelled compass wrong. And I don't neccessarily understand the title but it's good. ~Keep dreaming~ |
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