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Open Poetry #1

Tears

Tim
Senior Member

since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

0 posted 1999-08-31 10:22 AM

She cries
at his demise.
Tears.
Fears.
What will portend
at life mates end?
Endless grief,
lost belief.
Frustration,
isolation.
Alone,
on her own.
Cope?
Hope?
She dies.
No one cries.
No tears.
No fears.
Portend?
End.

Emmy
Member

since 1999-06-29

Posts 194
KY

1 posted 1999-08-31 07:54 PM

Quite a unique rhyming style there. I don't think I've ever seen a poem done that way before. I like it, I really like it. Keep writing!

WhtDove
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-22

Posts 9245
Illinois

2 posted 1999-08-31 07:57 PM

I liked it also! Stands on it's own! Great job!!!!

caroline
Senior Member

since 1999-08-16

Posts 1218
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3 posted 1999-08-31 08:02 PM

Really well done! I like the style you used..it fits the words you chose...makes it all flow together quite nicely.

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

4 posted 1999-08-31 10:56 PM

Effectively portentious......Nice job...

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

5 posted 1999-09-01 10:06 AM

Sad, and well done.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2004-04-17 01:43 PM

short and powerful

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