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Open Poetry #1

Waiting At The Temple

caroline
Senior Member

since 1999-08-16

Posts 1218
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0 posted 1999-08-28 09:20 AM

I wanted to tell the world
how much I loved you
but your name was
unknown
I erected anonymous
monuments to you
and gained the praise
of many who did not
understand
I did not want your praise
your love would have been
enough…so told
with your touch
but withheld like
heroin to an addict who
kills the beast
but wants its soul
and you departed with
mine in hand
I threw my anger
at your back and
built a temple of
disillusion in your honor
And now you have come
to inspect it … you
walk tentatively through
the door, my heart
stands still
when you greet me
and in wretched silence
I wait
for your next word

caroline
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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...

Skyfyre
Senior Member

since 1999-08-15

Posts 1906
Sitting in Michael's Lap

1 posted 1999-08-28 02:55 PM

Freeverse is not something that I feel qualified to evaluate ... but I thought this was put together very well ... the lines flowed nicely and the thoughts came through clearly ... I like!

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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
(Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.")

WhtDove
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-22

Posts 9245
Illinois

2 posted 1999-08-28 03:52 PM

I liked this!

Balladeer

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

3 posted 1999-08-28 04:11 PM

very intricately woven. The phrasing is beautiful and the thought....provoking.

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