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Heartbreak Genesis |
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H. Arlequin Member
since 1999-08-23
Posts 210 |
Heartbreak Genesis In the beginning darkness, spatial deep... plankton, bacteria, time prepense, asleep in creation's yet to be, man, days away... the Logos spoke a ramah to light day one, and what He said, He saw was good. The omnipresent Spirit's aegis hovering, pre-existent, Father, Son, the One covering creation's pangs, out of the canopy gray, spoke sweet from salt and sky to fill day two, and what He saw, He said was good. "Let the waters be gathered in one place, let dry ground arise and show its face, let the land grow plants, and fruit convey both food and seed", thus it was so in day three, and what He said, He saw was good. "Let the lights shine through canopy mist that seasons of days and years will persist, let sun, moon and stars in delight display the magnificence of the iniverse, to see day four", and what He saw, He said was good. "Let the water teem with life beneath the sky let the earth proliferate with birds that fly, each according to their kind, in issue repay." He spoke, fish and fowl were created in day five, and what He said, He saw was good. "Let the land produce life, male and female, let Us make man like Us, let him prevail over creatures of sea, land, and air, stay the thirst, knowing Us, to be Us after day six", and what He saw, would break His heart. --H. Arlequin |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Very complicated rhyme scheme to this piece. 'Tis rich in imagery as well as being an interesting retelling of the Creation. ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I'm afraid that I need to study this one more - I see a very simple rhyme scheme woven quite intricately into a wonderfully flowing work.. Your theme is, of course, is masterful - I just feel that there is more to be uncovered with every read.... stay tuned - I'll be returning to this one for sure....  |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Magnificent! The way you have used the imagery, message and rhyme scheme together reminds me of a quilt...beautiful things all stitched together to become something awesome. This is wonderful work, you should be very proud. ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
H.Arlequin, This is a piece of Zen and like Nan will have to read it again. Wonderful job. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
remarkable ...loved this one...agree with all above, will reread this again and again ------------------ Shannon |
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H. Arlequin Member
since 1999-08-23
Posts 210 |
the profusion of your wonderful comments excite an ancient heart to strive for those unattainable mountains heights, reinvigorated, remotivated.... smoooooooooches all :-)) HA |
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