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The Lament |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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The Lament Gliding in on fog’s whispers, come to me, come to me, enchanting song do sing, come to me, come to me, mystery as to what it is you will bring, come to me, following me to my vespers, come to me. At the seventh hour I shall pray, come to me, come to me, enchanting song do again sing, come to me, come to me, forth will come everything you bring, come to me changing night to dawn of day, come to me. Ah dear keeper of my heart, come to me, come to me, forever I’ve prayed we never part, come to me, come to me, your entrancing song, your mysteries, come to me, left me blind so I can see, come to me. I only know the night from the cool it brings, come to me hiding from the day’s rays, abandoned, come to me, singing your song, knowing now the mystery, come to me, come to me praying you stay for all eternity, come to me, come to me. Now you’ve come, engulfing me, come to me, come to me, with your fog’s breath, lift me high, come to me, come to me, While I pray, come to me Let me breathe my last breath on your face, and leave. 23 August, 1999 ©KRJ ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 08-24-99).] |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Wow!!! This is great! It has a real hypnotic effect to it, a chant-like flow. Nicely done  ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Sunshine, this is so different! How did you come up with the rhyme scheme! I like it, sounds like a song.  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Caroline, thank you for your comments. I like your interpretation of the "effect". PdV, I have NO idea where this came from. The words began flowing, and even I was sitting here wondering "where in the world [or nether world] is this coming from???" My second thought was "oh wow, how am I ever going to explain this one?" Your guess is as good as mine...I guess I have a muse out there, after all. As always, Thank you for reading my "works". ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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traveler Member
since 1999-08-17
Posts 119 |
Wow ...sigh ...speachless here ... thank you Sunshine |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, Alright I'm comming. Gees you sound like my wife. Enjoyed the poem. |
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