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Deb Lynne Member
since 1999-08-19
Posts 180Where blue skies meet blue ocean 
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Deep inside there is a part Of you that needs to know What makes you act this way What makes this feeling grow? Why did it happen to you And what did you do, you ask? To find the answers that you seek Will not be an easy task Sometimes it happens just because Cupid thought you needed a jolt And sent an arrow full of love Through your heart like a lightning bolt It starts from a smile that warms your heart And send shivers through your spine Like you do when you look at me And I know that you are mine Don't worry yourself trying to answer The questions that run through your head Accept all that's been sent your way And enjoy what you're feeling instead! Deb Lynne '99 |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
i agree with you, Deb, sometimes it's better not to analyze our feelings and just let them take their course...though the same should be done with the negative/painful feelings, and that's the part most of us find troublesome  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I liked this one Deb....the rhyme was very true and in most places the rythym flowed nicely. My only suggestion is to delete a word on a few lines to smoothen the rythym up just a bit |
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