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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
The first breath of life fills me with wonder. Gazing at them sets my heart all aglow. Innocence tears my scarred heart asunder. These feelings I am now able to show. Gazing at them sets my heart all aglow. On my mind tonight is a baby's scent. These feelings I am now able to show. It took my heart forever to relent. On my mind tonight is a baby's scent. Newborn babies seem to just draw me in. It took my heart forever to relent. Babies make each of my feelings deepen. Newborn babies seem to just draw me in. Cast by them is a very subtle spell. Babies make each of my feelings deepen. They adeptly drew me out of my shell. Cast by them is a very subtle spell. They love everyone just for who they are. They adeptly drew me out of my shell. Opening my heart, they left it ajar. They love everyone just for who they are. Innocence tears my scarred heart asunder. Opening my heart, they left it ajar. The first breath of life fills me with wonder. ©1999 DreamEvil ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© [This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 08-19-99).] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
very good dream i applaude the technique and the message is good |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Beautifully done, Dream. I love babies..absolutely adore them. All children, actually.  ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Perfect. Loved it, DE. |
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Gentle Soul Member
since 1999-07-12
Posts 273Vinton,Ohio USA |
this is beautiful Dream! you write so well brother! ------------------ Gënt£ë¤§°û£ |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Ah, the sweet innocence of babies. They remind us of that which is truly pure. Very well done, DE. ------------------ "Grief can take care of itself, but to get the full value of joy you must have somebody to divide it with." *Mark Twain* |
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Dragoness Senior Member
since 1999-08-07
Posts 513 |
Very sweet! Well written! You are the best brother!  ------------------ Set you heart free and your mind will follow. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Dreamie! A pantoum! And you didn't even warn us. Way to go, man. I liked the theme, although it doesn't seem to be you...yanno...not dark and DreamEvilly at all. Are you slipping? Have you "come over to the Light side, Luke?" Great subject. Great delivery. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
DreamEvil, Don't know how I missed this wonderful pantoun. You are very talented. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
LOL...LJA. This was wonderful! The innocence of children. How truthful they are, and don't see us for our shortcomings. Have lots of them Dream!!!! [This message has been edited by WhtDove (edited 08-19-99).] |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Oh, to hold a newborn baby... *sigh* That's when one first learns the meaning of true love! Excellent pantoum... you've mastered the style. ------------------ ~onevoice~ "She looked at her life like lines, never-ending, constantly forming, reforming and bending." |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
I'm with wayoutwalt here, I really liked the originality of your technique, you don't see that often, if ever ! Very nice piece.....Just remember, babies grow up to be little monsters !! LOL ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Very, very good. ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Not only a pantoum, but on the light side as well..... |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
I aim to please, myself and others. My aim seems to be pretty good. |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
ahhhh babies...like holding a little rosebud in your hand. You've captured the feeling of seeing that new little face, and made me smile Thanks!------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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pen of passion Member
since 1999-08-11
Posts 234 |
DE you are well deep-written man. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Wonderful poem, DE! You definitely aimed well. *S* |
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Rita Member
since 1999-07-19
Posts 55Danville Va. 24540 |
babies are wonderful, beautiful to observe. You show the wonder of a child, and grasp its first breath, and the purity of a child. the touch of their silken body, who can not love babies. ------------------ "And the day came, where the risk to remain tight in a bud, was more painful than the risk it took to blossom" |
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IsabelleSkye Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 253 |
a blonde haired, blue eyed little angel to hold your hand and call you Daddy... *sigh* well I want one too!(that's not a hint LOL) BUT....she better call me Mommy *wink* (btw this was lovely!) Izzy |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Very nice Dream...I get the pleasure of seeing this on a daily basis...what better joy than new life |
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