Open Poetry #1 |
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Poem |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA ![]() |
I wrote a poem once, I thought it very good. I wrote it for my bothers, hangin' around the 'hood. I wrote it with feeling, about my fellow 'home's. all about their dew rags, and their neatly shave domes. I wrote about the pistols, their clubs, knives and glocks. I wrote about their razors, they carry in thier socks. My homey's read my poems, had themselves a hoot. I doubted that I hurt them, till they began to shoot. ------------------ Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. JP |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA |
Different but enjoyable. Nice introspective about where you are from and what you grew up in. Not too many people will allow so many others there. Jfreak |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
The title drew me...simple....maybe we should all just title each piece "Poem"...it would save racking our brains for just the right catchy title! The poem (with the spelling errors) was good.. a 'savvy' poem about today.. no Shakespeare for these guys! |
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pen of passion Member
since 1999-08-11
Posts 234 |
Very nice. |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Thanks y'all (you too PDV even though you pointed out my spelling errors ![]() jfreak - I hate to break the news to you my friend, but this poem is simply a flight of fancy, no deep meaning about my life or where I grew up. ------------------ Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. JP |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Poignant, nonetheless...... |
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Sue Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 383France |
And we thought we'd got to know you better! Never mind, I know enough - you write good poems. |
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