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Alicat
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since 1999-05-23
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Coastal Texas

0 posted 1999-06-21 04:38 PM


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*** |-P
!!!!....


The Avante-Garde Alicat



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Le Jongleur Aspirante




[This message has been edited by Alicat (edited 06-21-99).]

© Copyright 1999 Alastair Adamson - All Rights Reserved
Nan
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1 posted 1999-06-21 04:43 PM


I don't think I've EVER seen such PURR-FECT rhyme and meter....

sea_of_okc
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since 1999-06-15
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2 posted 1999-06-21 04:47 PM


Ummmm... will there be a test on this?
Craig
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since 1999-06-10
Posts 444

3 posted 1999-06-21 04:58 PM


Here’s a few words you may want to use in your next one, trust me they’re all there only they might not be in the right order


When the pressure fell on shoulders bent already twisted from a journey in these shoes
I failed, fell, flailed, spat blood and was sent to the house where they send the confused
found guilty, lost words rushing, pushing senseless words that I had dreamed and written,
the bad words, cracked my mind from ear to ear it took my sanity, but They took my kitten
small kitten, high price for bad words written, taken to cat prison, by the angel men in white,
I screamed loudly, wildly, but only in my head disturbed men need no more disturbing, at night
I see the man I used to be rhyming times delight remember how this nightmares rush started
a word found, sound round, ground, bound I wrote verse for the tired and broken hearted,
caught words, sought and bought, placed on a page in lines which danced out, only to play
word hunt, find the one that fits, perfectly aged form and sound meter, hound it on its way
to cracked mind worn, fingers bleeding lip pens paper clip, chip whip a weaver, tune
turned beast to beauty, sinned to sonnets son and this dad sad, sad dad into a perfect loon.
my writing and reading, now mired retired to retread these last words, meaning re-meant
by moving the commas, from poem to prose to tell what pressure, falls on shoulders bent.

Let your self be free among the bars. Otherwise there’s no beer. Sobriety masks reality

Alicat
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since 1999-05-23
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Coastal Texas
4 posted 1999-06-21 05:01 PM


Craig, I want to hear this one performed aloud...what a wonderful loony rant!!!

Gotta hear it, can hear it, need voice, sipping coffe, no words save gurgles, gargles, slowly drowning while speaking, giving voice to punctuate tion.


Alicat

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5 posted 1999-06-21 05:15 PM


Let me see if I got this right.

He: A period?
She: Yes, a period.
And I'm Happy!
He: I'm sad.
She: Why?
He: BECAUSE!!!
She: But why? Why?
He: Oh, I'm so blue!
She: Well, I'm asterical. And I'm happy!
Happy! Happy! Happy!

Did I get it right?

Alicat
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since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094
Coastal Texas
6 posted 1999-06-22 01:41 AM


Well, I feel kinda silly.
Little did I realize when I posted this that the little emote thingy made little faces. This was inspired by Nan telling me and showing me some of the HORRID material she is going through. I was thinking of e.e. cummings a lot, as the majority had no punctuation at all...so I supplied it. :P

Alicat

p.s.: All interpretations are the sole responsiblity of the reader/interpreter. heheheh

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Le Jongleur Aspirante




[This message has been edited by Alicat (edited 06-22-99).]

Ron
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since 1999-05-19
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7 posted 1999-06-22 07:00 AM


I had an almost overwhelming urge to edit this, Ali...

And then I realized - everything is spelled correctly, all the punctuation is perfectly placed. And you certainly covered the topic more than adequately...

Ron

Munda
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8 posted 2000-03-05 11:25 AM


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