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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas 
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. ? . ?! .  {:-{ ? !!!! ?? .  *** |-P !!!!.... The Avante-Garde Alicat  ------------------ Le Jongleur Aspirante [This message has been edited by Alicat (edited 06-21-99).] |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I don't think I've EVER seen such PURR-FECT rhyme and meter....  |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
Ummmm... will there be a test on this? |
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Craig Member
since 1999-06-10
Posts 444 |
Here’s a few words you may want to use in your next one, trust me they’re all there only they might not be in the right order When the pressure fell on shoulders bent already twisted from a journey in these shoes I failed, fell, flailed, spat blood and was sent to the house where they send the confused found guilty, lost words rushing, pushing senseless words that I had dreamed and written, the bad words, cracked my mind from ear to ear it took my sanity, but They took my kitten small kitten, high price for bad words written, taken to cat prison, by the angel men in white, I screamed loudly, wildly, but only in my head disturbed men need no more disturbing, at night I see the man I used to be rhyming times delight remember how this nightmares rush started a word found, sound round, ground, bound I wrote verse for the tired and broken hearted, caught words, sought and bought, placed on a page in lines which danced out, only to play word hunt, find the one that fits, perfectly aged form and sound meter, hound it on its way to cracked mind worn, fingers bleeding lip pens paper clip, chip whip a weaver, tune turned beast to beauty, sinned to sonnets son and this dad sad, sad dad into a perfect loon. my writing and reading, now mired retired to retread these last words, meaning re-meant by moving the commas, from poem to prose to tell what pressure, falls on shoulders bent. Let your self be free among the bars. Otherwise there’s no beer. Sobriety masks reality |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Craig, I want to hear this one performed aloud...what a wonderful loony rant!!! Gotta hear it, can hear it, need voice, sipping coffe, no words save gurgles, gargles, slowly drowning while speaking, giving voice to punctuate tion. Alicat |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Let me see if I got this right. He: A period? She: Yes, a period. And I'm Happy! He: I'm sad. She: Why? He: BECAUSE!!! She: But why? Why? He: Oh, I'm so blue! She: Well, I'm asterical. And I'm happy! Happy! Happy! Happy! Did I get it right? |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Well, I feel kinda silly. Little did I realize when I posted this that the little emote thingy  made little faces. This was inspired by Nan telling me and showing me some of the HORRID material she is going through. I was thinking of e.e. cummings a lot, as the majority had no punctuation at all...so I supplied it. :PAlicat p.s.: All interpretations are the sole responsiblity of the reader/interpreter. heheheh ------------------ Le Jongleur Aspirante [This message has been edited by Alicat (edited 06-22-99).] |
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Ron
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-05-19
Posts 8669Michigan, US |
I had an almost overwhelming urge to edit this, Ali... And then I realized - everything is spelled correctly, all the punctuation is perfectly placed. And you certainly covered the topic more than adequately... Ron |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
4ty3 |
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