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Sweet Ireland |
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Terri Member
since 1999-08-08
Posts 82Turtle Creek, PA |
The ship rail gripped tight in his hands As he stared 'cross the bay, in hushed voice did he say "Fare thee well to ye, sweet Ireland" He then turned to me, in his eyes I did see A man who was filled with despair. He started to speak as a tear crossed his cheek Soft ocean breeze tousling his hair. "Back there, it is said, that I killed a man dead Tis a lie but I daern't take a stand For it was me dear wife who had wielded th'knife To the taxman who'd take all our land." "So now must I roam, travel far from me home. To protect her, I'll do what I can. I'll sail all the seas but m'heart won't be free For it's there, in fair Ireland Fare thee well to ye, sweet Ireland" [This message has been edited by Terri (edited 08-16-99).] |
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Sue Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 383France |
A lovely poem, Terri. Somehow it epitomises loss and homesickness. It's so good that I think it would be worthwhile to have another look at line 15 - it's just not quite up to the standard of the rest. |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
assume the spelling is intentional...a sad yet lovely tale, Terri  |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
This Irish lass thought it was beautiful! ------------------ "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Terri, I've been to Ireland many times They say it has 40 shades of green and it's true. A beautiful poem and it says loads. |
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Terri Member
since 1999-08-08
Posts 82Turtle Creek, PA |
Sue--you were right! I gave it a nudge and I think it flows better now. Many thanks! Elvira--after a couple of edits, any misspellings NOW are intentional..LOL! Saxoness--thank you! That is such a lovely quote...and how appropriate. Seymour--How I envy you! Someday, somehow, I WILL get there. My thanks to you all |
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Sue Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 383France |
Terri, a really great improvement! Thank you for listening, and thank you for letting me know. Just for that I'm sending you back to the top. |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
It's heartbreaking when somebody's home is torn apart by tragedy. In this day, age, and land, we all have so much to be thankful for.  ~sky I hope someday you get the chance to live like you were dying.... |
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dollmaker Member
since 2006-08-30
Posts 155mass dorchester |
i think that poem was lovely my mother's dad came from ireland. lovely poem. great job.from dollmaker |
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