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My Dear Friend |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois 
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I really need to bounce this off someone. If their are words I can change to make it better, or leave it how it is. I would appreciate the help. It breaks my heart dear friend To see what they're puttin you through They don't see nor understand Oh, if only that they knew. If they could understand And the knowledge of God retain I truly do believe Their lips they would refrain. They know not what they say No knowledge of what they do Hurtful things they speak With no idea they hurt you. They're striking out in anger Rage is all they see They truly cannot understand What this lie will do to thee. They stand in frustration Knowing not what to do And listen to the others And shift the blame on you. I know right now your hurting My heart for you does bleed But I will always be there In your times of joy or need. For you are very precious And you mean a lot to me It was only by the will of God Our friendship came to be. All that I can tell you Is pray within your heart That they will come to understand From God you will not part. My friend it rests with God And all that's in His will No matter what may happen I will love you still. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Whtdove, there is a strong message in this poem but it does need a lot of work. I would be happy to go into it in detail and e-mail my suggestions to you, if you would like. Let me know. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
That would be greatly appreciated Balladeer!! |
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