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DreamEvil
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

0 posted 1999-08-14 03:16 PM

Forgive my fledgling attempts at this free verse thing. I'm posting this in CA as well.

I cast
longing glances
at the blade
awestruck by it's
simple beauty.
Each loving caress
of the constant
unchanging
hardness of the knife
moves my icy soul to a more perfect
marriage with the blade.
My lips touch this loyal and
worthy
partner in what presages
an act of primal
union with this
jealous lover.
A quick, unfeeling motion
grants me her
kiss
an ecstasy of anticipated
delight
brought on by her gentle touch
that tenderly
sliced into my flesh.
With near sexual release
her kiss
eases my ache
for the blade.

©1999 DreamEvil

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Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?
DreamEvil©

[This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 08-14-99).]

Dragoness
Senior Member

since 1999-08-07

Posts 513

1 posted 1999-08-14 03:51 PM

Nice free verse.

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Set you heart free and your mind will follow.

Gentle Soul
Member

since 1999-07-12

Posts 273
Vinton,Ohio USA

2 posted 1999-08-14 04:11 PM

*hugs* Im just glad you are ok brother..

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Gënt£ë¤§°û£

thursdayschild
Member

since 1999-07-01

Posts 169
Houston, Tx.

3 posted 1999-08-14 04:35 PM

forgive you, for this? think I'll thank you
instead! Awesome work, thanks.

Alwye

Moderator

Member Elite

since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

4 posted 1999-08-14 10:29 PM

I'd say this is a pretty darned good free verse, my friend!! (I wish I could do this well). Keep it up!

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*Krista Knutson*

"If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood

Ominous
Member

since 1999-07-04

Posts 68
Canada

5 posted 1999-08-14 11:14 PM

What a greeat job Dream.
Never underestimate what you are capable of.

~one voice~
Senior Member

since 1999-07-08

Posts 664
Billings, MT USA

6 posted 1999-08-15 01:55 AM

Like I said, love, you write what you feel...and you express yourself so very beautifully! Wonderful job!!!

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~onevoice~

"She looked at her life
like lines, never-ending,
constantly forming,
reforming and bending."

DreamEvil
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

7 posted 1999-08-16 02:15 PM

Guarded thank you, I'll see how it faired in CA next.

DreamEvil
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

8 posted 1999-08-18 03:46 AM

I'll be posting this in Dark as well. After conferring with the powers that be in the morning, I might be deleting this from here.

Michael

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

9 posted 1999-08-18 05:55 AM

Very intense piece.
Definately appeals to the darkside.

Michael

WhtDove
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-22

Posts 9245
Illinois

10 posted 1999-08-18 01:21 PM

Well done my friend!

[This message has been edited by WhtDove (edited 08-18-99).]

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