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Carolina Girl Member
since 1999-08-14
Posts 63 |
To Be Loved I love to be the last face you see as we say goodnight. I love to be kissed by you in dawns early light. I love to be the hand you hold when you want me near. I love to be with you and hide when you want us to disappear. I love to be the warmth you feel on a cold winter's day. I love to be the ears that listen to hear what you say. I love to be the body you hug as you leave every morn. I love to be the needle and thread when your self-esteem is torn. I love to be the love in your life, the one who makes you sing. I love to be the one who loves you back, because of the love you bring. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Very nice form...rhythm is pretty close too...there are a few lines that are a beat or two off, but all in all it's a very nice little piece..! Good work ! ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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Carolina Girl Member
since 1999-08-14
Posts 63 |
Thank you. I know nothing of form, prose....have never studied or read of different styles..I KNOW it shows in my poems! :-) But, I just spit out my feelings....now that I've found a site that can teach me and help me along, I won't mind working on it! Just bear with me, and I guess you can watch me as I learn! Thank you for your compliments! *hugz* |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
 [This message has been edited by elvira (edited 08-14-99).] |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Any gal from Carolina is good enough for me. For not knowing much, your poem has some good qualities. "I want to be the needle and thread when your self-esteem is torn' is a particularly good line. We welcome you! |
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