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The Dance |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Feel the music in your heart Touching softly, t'will impart Upon the soul, heartfelt romance Two joined as one, in sensual dance Passions coursing throughout the night Swaying softly in Luna's light In song's reprise, love's symphony I sought my love, please come to me Sweet song's embrace, deep satin kiss I sought, I found, my mortal bliss But then the dawn, into the night The music fades, in morning's light On final note, so ends the dance As dancers wait for love's next chance To turn away the lance of pain And dance again the sweet refrain. [This message has been edited by Mike (edited 06-20-99).] [This message has been edited by Mike (edited 06-20-99).] |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Very nice, indeed, Mike - In response, I can only suggest that you look at the poem posted previously called "Cyber Seas", written by Ron (our gracious host here at Passions - with a repartee from me).... Check it out  [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 06-20-99).] |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I thought the first one of yours was excellent. This one is at least its equal, if not better. Nice work! |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Thanks for the kind words Balladeer... after following through on Nan's suggestion and seeing her and Ron's effort... whoa.... that is poetry... |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
This is very good! I really think you did a fine job. I look forward to reading more of your work. |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
sweet dance of romance....very well written  ------------------ one night at the airport...Childhood Memories...eight short weeks...your countenance...just watching tv...hoarse whispers...My One and Only...Tribute to M.J....Feel the need?...serving wench...the mistress...stolen hours...devotion...Master...apart |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Mike, It took me a while to find this, but I must say, it was well worth my search. This is a wonderful posting. The rhyme is very tight and the flow is like a gentle stream...so soft it just takes you right with it. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
How could I have not seen this one? It's exquisitely beautiful. Thank you Hoot for bringing it back up! |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Fabulous piece man! Makes me want to dance with you! You can dance, right? Beautiful rhyme and flow....it's hard to keep that and still say what you want eloquently...~blowing kisses~ ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sensuously romantic. Bravo. ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
I dance in luminescence of Luna's crescent, In the arms of a goddess, from heaven sent. Aye, I will dance with you as I caress your silken delight, As in your arms I sway enraptured, from dusk until the morning's light. [This message has been edited by Mike (edited 08-14-99).] |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
So very beautiful, and so romantic..this fits my mood very well right now..*sighs*. Thank you for sharing a truly lovely piece of work. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
I glide across the ballroom floor, as band begins to play, Take you gently in my arms, As dance to love's ballet. Gershwin love songs fill the air as new dance has begun, I feel your warmth in our embrace as two now dance as one. Through the night til rising sun I hold you in my arms, Dancing in our lover's waltz, Entranced by music's charms. Music calms the savage breast, but dance doth charm the heart, Forever in our lover's waltz, With dance we ne'er will part. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
It flowed like a song ... exquisite. I'll have to tell my love to read this one; it almost wouldn't be a stretch to dance to it ... Well done. ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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