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Daddy, Please Don't Cry (a tear-jerker)
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Daddy, Please Don't Cry (a tear-jerker) |
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Emmy Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 194KY |
Daddy, daddy! Please come quick! Mommy fell down and she looks real sick! She was going to the door daddy, to get the mail But then she grabbed her heart and her face got pale I asked her what's wrong, but she couldn't speak And then she fell down cause her knees got weak She won't move daddy, she's laying so still No daddy, this morning I didn't see her take her pill Don't be upset daddy, it'll be alright She's just taking a nap, she didn't sleep well last night That's right daddy, go call 911 Do I get to ride an ambulence? Oh how fun! I do? Oh good. Are they on their way? Hey daddy, while we're waiting, want to come and play? How come you have to be with mom? I'm sure she'll be okay Daddy, she's only sleeping, she's just real tired today I hear sirens daddy! Look outside! Here they are! I see lots of men in white jackets coming out of that hospital car! Hello mister! And you too, sir. How are you today? Dont' snap at me daddy! Why do I have to get out of the way? Oh please be careful sir, when you carry my mom on that cot I don't want you to hurt her 'cause I love her a whole whole lot Daddy can I ride in the back with mom? She needs my company And when she wakes up I really want to be the first thing she sees I can? I can? Oh yay! This will be the best! Sorry daddy, I'll get on in, I don't mean to be a pest Hey daddy? I'm going to talk to mommy, just in case she's really awake I'll talk to her while we're on our way; you know, just for her sake Hey mommy? It's me, your little girl. i'm the one here holding your hand. Oh, you don't want to talk right now? That's okay, I understand. Look daddy we're already here! oh I think I've been here once before Daddy that time was really scary, I don't want to go in any more Fine, daddy, I'll come along, if you say I must I really want to see my mommy, but, well, it's just... Okay daddy, I'll sit here, I promise I'll be good I want to see mommy when she's better, so I'll do as I know I should But daddy why do we have to wait here in this stupid waiting room? I don't like the way it feels in here, it's so full of scary gloom! Look daddy here's the doctor! Why does he look so sad? What's he saying, daddy? What is it that's so bad? Of course mommy's coming back! Can I see her, by the way? She's dead? What do you mean daddy? What a funny thing to say... How come I can't see her daddy? Please, I want to know why! I want to tell her "get better!" Oh daddy, please don't cry! Daddy, I don't believe the doctor, or anything he said Mommy's got to come back to me, I promise, she's not dead Ok daddy, I won't talk any more. I'm sorry, I'll leave you alone I'll just sit over here and wait for mommy, cause daddy, I want to go home... [This message has been edited by Emmy (edited 08-08-99).] |
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Sundance Member
since 1999-07-11
Posts 123 |
That wuz soooooooooooooooo sad !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! VEry good job!  |
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Emmy Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 194KY |
Thanks... I kinda got misty-eyed while writing it! I had to go and scrounge around my house for something funny to relieve me of the mood this poem put me in! This one's a little too depressing even for my taste, I won't be writing like this for a while now. I've gotten it out of my system and now it'll be a substantial amount of time before I can do it again! |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Emmy... Was that based on experience? Big HUGS ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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Emmy Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 194KY |
No, thank goodness. I have not experienced the loss of a parent yet. But I know friends who have and this was an outpouring of the grief I feel for them. I'm lucky enough to have both parents alive and well. But my prayers go out to those who are not as fortunate. |
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Dragoness Senior Member
since 1999-08-07
Posts 513 |
THere are no harder words to hear than these.Excellent work. ------------------ Set you heart free and your mind will follow. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Very Sad ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
You are certainly right, this is a tearjerker..excellent piece of work. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "Your kiss upon my face feels like a brush with grace, baby thats all it takes to take me higher..." SHeDaisy |
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angel girl Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 322within a whisper... |
this was so sad.  especially when the ambulance was coming and the little girl thought it was going to be so fun to ride in it. ------------------ delight in the little things. [This message has been edited by angel girl (edited 08-09-99).] |
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Emmy Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 194KY |
I hope I haven't frightened everyone in this forum into thinking I'm spiraling into a deep pit of depressing despair or anything! I only write like this occasionally when the mood strikes. It's a good time to vent. I'll try to come up with something a bit happier for my next post! |
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Delores Hall Member
since 1999-07-16
Posts 342USA |
What a horrible thing for a young child to go through.I truly hope that wasn't you. |
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Sue Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 383France |
Beautifully written. |
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Emmy Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 194KY |
Thank you all... I didn't think I'd get this many responses! Perhaps I should have mood swings more often! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
A tear-jerker it is. Very well done! Most excellent poem I just loved it. Though it was so sad. Reminds me of that song...Last kiss. That one is sad too. Maybe this should be made into a song as well. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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