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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas 
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White Shoulders He lied Pure and simple A little white lie To him 'Out with the boys' And I wish I could believe The White Shoulders On his shirt Came from me Alicat 8-6-99 |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
a mime perhaps?  ------------------ If Haydn is the father of symphonies...And Mozart is the son of symphonies...Then Beethoven is the god of symphonies!!! |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
err, ahh, Alicat? Perhaps I know where he went. Have you read Balladeer's poem about the diner? Now, don't get upset. Just think about it. Your wardrobe could double overnight! |
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Ladycat 
since 1999-07-05
Posts 782At the edge and a doorway,TX |
You have put in a vague and a hard place.. Where are you coming from with this piece? Is this about a priest? Nope, never mind that comment.. hehehe.. You know that I have sat here and read this for the last ten minutes and I don't get it.. I thought that maybe it was about a soldier.. hehehe.. You know that I have to know what was behind this now don't you.. I'm lost and I can't get out... HELP!!!!!! I already know that you are going to send me to hell for this one.. You know that I'm just kidding and that I like the piece.. Now all that I have to do is understand it.. Love, Lady ------------------ Live in my world just once and you'll find yourself enraptured. [This message has been edited by Ladycat (edited 08-06-99).] |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Makeup: it can both hide or accentuate the truth of what lies below. A well written piece Alicat. |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
The ability to express without a wasted word or syllable... and yet paint the complete picute... the essence of a fine poem... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Very well written Ali.....not a single wasted word!!! ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Ok, first off, thanks everyone for the responses...I can see this was not interpreted as it was written. FYI, White Shoulders is a brand of women's perfume, which is alluded to in this poem about possible betrayal from a lady's perspective. Hope that clears things up.  Alicat |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
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