Open Poetry #1 |
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JohnDoe82 Junior Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 42MO, USA |
Unconditional Love The skies above are strange and great, Her wonders I can see, For when it's dark her stars shine down, And glad my soul can be. Her sun brings warmth to all the land, And warms my heart as well, Her moon, while cold, doth bring me light, And leads me from my hell. Her clouds bring shade unto my back, Her rain, it fills the seas, Her snow is soft and gently falls, And puts my mind at ease. Too much of one can bring me death, Too few, my fate's the same, I can't control the skies above, Or learn to play its game. Control is gone, but hope is not, I must accept her will, For if I weather this strong storm, I'll learn to love her still. [This message has been edited by JohnDoe82 (edited 08-06-99).] |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Very beautiful. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "Your kiss upon my face feels like a brush with grace, baby thats all it takes to take me higher..." SHeDaisy |
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angel girl Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 322within a whisper... |
very nice. i loved the way you described things. it was simple, yet elegant and powerful. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Beautiful!!! What about....Her Wonders??? |
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JohnDoe82 Junior Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 42MO, USA |
The Title "Unconditional Love" has been suggested and I think I'm going to go with it. |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Beautiful, you are very good. Welcome, glad you came to join us. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Another fine submission. Something that we are all subject to. |
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Moonlight Member
since 1999-06-25
Posts 105Auburn, Alabama USA |
a true appreciation for nature! beautiful poem |
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