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graham
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since 1999-07-31

Posts 60
South Yorkshire, England

0 posted 1999-08-05 02:11 PM

Lost in space
I found direction
For just one brief moment
I believed I could give life
When you made me the brightest star
I shone so hard for you
I gave everything to burn so brightly
To be the centre of your universe
But you happened to glance away
and see an even brighter star
One who outshines me
I am pale by comparison
The universe is infinitely cold and lonely
Now my starlight falters
I'm burning out
Unable to shine again

[This message has been edited by graham (edited 08-05-99).]

swan
Member

since 1999-07-19

Posts 58
california, usa

1 posted 1999-08-05 03:06 PM

this is very sad, and it's something that happens to people everyday. you express your feelings very well. this is a very beautiful poem.
Swan

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"You can't make a heart love somebody, you can tell it what to do but it won't listen at all. You can't make a heart love somebody, you can lead a heart to love, but you can't make it fall.--Clint Black

swan
Member

since 1999-07-19

Posts 58
california, usa

2 posted 1999-08-05 03:07 PM

this is very sad, and it's something that happens to people everyday. you express your feelings very well. this is a very beautiful poem.
Swan

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"You can't make a heart love somebody, you can tell it what to do but it won't listen at all. You can't make a heart love somebody, you can lead a heart to love, but you can't make it fall.--Clint Black

Balladeer

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

3 posted 1999-08-05 03:26 PM

An excellent metaphor all too true. Perhaps that is why, instead of shining as brightly as we can, we tend to hold something in reserve just in case. Welcome, graham. Shine on.

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

4 posted 1999-08-05 07:08 PM

Very nice piece Graham.....welcome, I am looking forward to more from you!!

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

5 posted 1999-08-05 08:20 PM

This is wonderful! A sad comment on how we view ourselves...maybe if we just hang on a bit, someone will come along and gaze at us.. and maybe the one who looked for a brighter star will find that star is tarnished inside! You work is very good!!!!

unknown
New Member

since 1999-08-05

Posts 4

6 posted 1999-08-05 08:24 PM

How well I understand this. piece..

But remember.. sometimes you have to look "inside" yourself for the star .. instead of "outward"..

That's where the treasure really lies.

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