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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
With voices of the nightingale, the bards they speak of love Not with words of mortals, but thoughts from god's above They speak of Helen's beauty, that launched a thousand ships In vain I try to mimic, but speak with mortal lips For I have met my Venus, she comes in still of night Sweet flower of the heavens, outshines the welkin's light I've supped her lips of rose' wine, caressed her in my arms And tho' alas, a mortal be, have felt her goddess charms Come to me my Dulcinea, thou beauty doth entwine Entice me with your nectar sweet, with tastes of fragrant wine Quench the yearnings deep inside, desires you instill With pleasures of your satin bloom, mine passion cup you fill Then softly steal into the night, amongst the rising mist For I am thine, my heart doth feel, as if by heaven kissed. |
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JANNA Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 51arlington, tx usa |
what a classically written piece of work. It feels like a timeless classic inthe present. Absolutely the best love poem I have read yet! Keep those coming! |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Thank you for the kind comments Janna |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Hmmm shades of the Bard...excellent poem. Welcome to the group. Let's have more please!!!!! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
gotta tell ya, Mike. This is better than good. the sentences are excellent, the meter is first class, the rhyme scheme is exact, and the vocabulary is top notch (other than that, it's a lousy poem). I can really admire someone who put this much effort into his work. Nice job! |
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Augchic711 Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 80O'Fallon, IL, USA |
Bravo Mike bravo!! This poem is a wonderful expression of true love! Thank you soooo much for sharing it with me! I look forward to your encore! More more please! *******Augchic711******* |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
All righty, Mike - You make an entrance like that one, you know that we're looking for an equally good encore - and rest assured, there are many of us here who absolutely love this style of poetry... Welcome Aboard!! |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Thank you all for your kind welcome.... |
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Allyn New Member
since 1999-06-19
Posts 3Chula Vista, California, USA |
I wish somebody would write me a love poem like this! I applaud you! |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
In a sonnet mood... |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
How lovely! Hmmmmm, I have to go talk to someone....I'm a little lovesick.  |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
A heart of a lover, the mind of a dreamer ...Brovo!! I'm thinking.. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ If with pen in hand I've made you think I've not wasted one drop of ink vlh. |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Beautiful...simply beautiful. ------------------ ..And down from the eternal heavens comes fate's jeweled fingertips, it's magic flowing into awaiting souls..--Krista Knutson *Krista Knutson* |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
The 'creme' should be at the top!  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
How could I have missed this when it was posted, I'm not quite sure, but it was truly my loss. Wonderful work! |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Thank you for nice comment Ms. Hoot |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Aaahhh...now this is truly worth all my efforts. As most all knew, I was gone for nearly 10 days to the ocean, and knew I missed some good stuff! Here I am, scrolling back over nearly 20 pgs. that flew by while I was gone, and I find a masterpiece such as this....back to the top it goes, I agree with Balladeer, it's lousy if it weren't for all the perfection!! Beautiful ! ~ blowing kisses~ ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Thank you kindly femmefatale. |
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