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Tim
Senior Member

since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

0 posted 1999-08-02 12:12 PM

One year has passed since Gentle Rose has died,
Since dirges played and silent mourners cried,
When does the pain release its viselike grip
Upon the soul, let loose this sinking ship?

Adrift upon this childless sea, I gaze
Upon her empty room, as empty days
In silent scream, black pain does overwhelm,
No where I sail, no Captain at the helm.

O' Gentle Rose, why won't you set me free,
I beg of you, why won't you answer me?
Do not you hear, I sing your hymns of praise?
Upon my knees, I seek your sweet bouquets.

O' Gentle Rose, your bud will never bloom,
But yet I fear, 'tis I within the tomb.

elvira
Senior Member

since 1999-07-06

Posts 936
California

1 posted 1999-08-02 12:19 PM

i must say, this one was more touching than the first poem...written from personal experience?...if so, my heart goes out to you

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If I had my mouth I would bite.
If I had my liberty I would do my liking.
In the mean time, let me be that I am, and seek not to alter me. ~Shakespeare~

Elizabeth

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Member Ascendant

since 1999-06-07

Posts 6871
Minnesota

2 posted 1999-08-02 12:19 PM

This is another beautiful poem, Tim! It's the perfect sequel to "Gentle Rose". The meter and rhyme are excellent, and it's so sad.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cheris'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."

Tim
Senior Member

since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

3 posted 1999-08-02 06:22 PM

Thank you both for your comments...
in my work I often deal with the deaths of infants and couldn't even begin to imagine the suffering of the parents; having four children myself...

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

4 posted 1999-08-02 06:28 PM

Beautiful work Tim.....I can't help but wonder more of what you do.

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

5 posted 1999-08-02 07:19 PM

Beautiful and heartbreaking....

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

6 posted 1999-08-02 07:49 PM

Lovely and sad! I liked it. Do the people in your real world know what a fine poet you are?

Justbleu
Member Elite

since 1999-08-31

Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)

7 posted 2005-10-29 01:15 AM

Your writing has alwayz messed with my heartstrings!!!! Beautiful writing but very sad!!!!!

Bridgette

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