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Vamp
New Member

since 1999-08-01

Posts 6
Schofield Bks, HI, USA

0 posted 1999-08-01 12:29 PM

A BEAUTIFUL NIGHT

In the beauty of the night,
we watched the passing storm,
and the rain fell so perfectly right,
as we watched until the dawn.

Seeing the beauty the others all miss,
hoping for love and a quieting kiss.
The night was so bold and the stars were so calm,
as we watched the rain together,
and we kissed until the dawn.

In the beauty of the morn,
we watched the rising sun,
and the world seemed completely reborn,
as we watched until twas noon.

Seeing the innocence the others all miss,
clinging to love in each others embrace.
The morning was young and the air was so calm,
as we watched the sun together,
and we kissed until twas noon.

In the beauty of the noon,
We watched the silent sea,
and the world seemed so alive and new,
as we watched until the eve.

Seeing the softness the others all miss,
being in love so joyful and bliss.
The water was clear, and the air was so clean,
as we watched the sea together,
and we kissed until the eve.

In the beauty of the eve,
we watched the clouds take flight,
and prepared for the oncoming storm,
as we watched until the night.

Seeing the calmness the others all miss,
as we watch the storm all over again.
The clouds were so soft, and the world seemed so right,
as we faced the storm together,
and we fell in love tonight.

Crystal
Member

since 1999-07-24

Posts 62
Hazel Park Mi U.S.A.

1 posted 1999-08-01 12:52 PM

Great Poem

Isn't love grand?

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Tinu
New Member

since 1999-08-01

Posts 7

2 posted 1999-08-01 12:54 PM

I love it. Your first submission, but I bet not your first poem....

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

3 posted 1999-08-01 08:09 PM

I like the unusual format used in this one...enjoyable read

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald

Elizabeth

Moderator

Member Ascendant

since 1999-06-07

Posts 6871
Minnesota

4 posted 1999-08-01 10:25 PM

This is really beautiful-good job Vamp. I liked the different images you used. It would be wonderful to be able to watch the day and night with someone I love.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cheris'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."

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