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Open Poetry #1

Scream of the Unamused

Haskins
Member

since 1999-06-26

Posts 85
Dallas, TX

0 posted 1999-07-31 12:32 PM

It seems a day--
Or years--
Ago,
When lazy water
Gurgled low
Across the sun-baked
Silver stones
To fold in pools
Of white-washed bone,
That I first noticed
I was alone.

And what else could
I do, but laugh,
And chisel out
My epitaph
Upon the face
Of swirling sky,
Where timid echoes
Breed and die,

And there are
No such fools as I...

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William Haskins AKA The Mad Monk
http://www.ionstorm.com/public/haskins/inner_sanctum.htm

Sheila
Junior Member

since 1999-06-18

Posts 23
Lansing, Michigan, Ingham

1 posted 1999-07-31 01:08 AM

I like this, it flows nicely, very good

CSwtThng
Member

since 1999-07-28

Posts 124

2 posted 1999-07-31 01:25 AM

Good poem, but know your never alone if you walk with God.

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

3 posted 1999-07-31 02:00 AM

EXCELLENT!!! This poem works wonderfully. You should be quite proud of yourself with this one. I love the imagery, the tone, the thought and especially the flow like that water you speak of....softly flowing but crashing thoughts upon this rock of a mind of mine. Absolutely loved this piece!

Haskins
Member

since 1999-06-26

Posts 85
Dallas, TX

4 posted 1999-08-01 08:19 PM

Thanks for your comments. It's always nice to read them...

I'll resist the temptation, CSwtThng, to respond the the comment about God, except to say that I truly believe in my heart that the person who believes that God walks with them is the most alone of all.

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William Haskins AKA The Mad Monk
http://www.ionstorm.com/public/haskins/inner_sanctum.htm

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