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The Nightingale |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
On noiseless feet, across the room he crept, As shadows danced on walls from taper's flame, He gazed upon her beauty as she slept As tenderly he whispered out her name. O' Nightingale, you touched within my heart And carried me to meadows in my mind, Do not you feel, the passions you impart Whilst in your arms, my soul you have entwined? Amongst the columbine in mountain lea, I feel within the song of nightingale, For I have danced love's sensual ballet, And on your wings, to ectasy did sail. O' Nightingale, time's come to let you fly, As I depart, and you wing to the sky. [This message has been edited by Mike (edited 07-30-99).] |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Excellent rhyme scheme and execution, Mike. Did you not rhyme the last two lines by design? I would be interested in your thoughts. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
that is what you call a brain freeze.... sorry about that..... thanks for the kind comment.... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Beautiful! Lyrical!  |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Beautiful...tweet, tweet, deserves a repost!  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very sweeping |
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