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Open Poetry #1

The Silent Invader

pusskatt
Junior Member

since 1999-07-22

Posts 30
Austrralia

0 posted 1999-07-29 07:29 PM

Loneliness invades me
more and more
each day
'till slowly it overcomes
and I fear I've lost my way

I feel it rising in me
I crave to see your face
my heart is surely breaking
I no longer can keep this pace

But another day is closer
closer to be with you
our love affair's not over
it's really just brand new

It's only distance that seperates us
not a distance in our hearts
soon we'll be together
no longer will we be apart

These things I say them daily
whenever I am missing you
but the loneliness still invades me
no matter what I do...

[This message has been edited by pusskatt (edited 07-30-99).]

WhtDove
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-22

Posts 9245
Illinois

1 posted 1999-07-29 08:42 PM

Very nicely done...I don't know but you may have made an oops. In the 4th verse, 1st line the "up" did you mean to put "us?"

Delores Hall
Member

since 1999-07-16

Posts 342
USA

2 posted 1999-07-30 12:18 PM

I really enjoyed your poem. It is sad when
one is lonely.

pusskatt
Junior Member

since 1999-07-22

Posts 30
Austrralia

3 posted 1999-07-30 05:19 AM

Thanks for the pick up whtdove...
and Delores, yes it sad...
I wrote this to my new husband who lives on the other side of the world.

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