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JP
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since 1999-05-25
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Loomis, CA

0 posted 1999-07-28 12:39 PM


Waiting quietly,
my hair is combed,
in my Sunday best.
Patiently I'm waiting,
for the others to come.
Listening to their words
laughing to myself,
'cause they really don't know.
I see your face in my mind's eye,
and determine to keep waiting.
I like the feel of my suit
the silken tie at my throat,
the spiffy shine on my shoes.
I sigh, in exasperation.
I should be kinder, in my waiting
'cause I know you have things to do
before you go.
You'll be here, when you are ready.
I relax, and vow to be patient
as they close the lid,
as I hear the dirt thud on top.
I smile inside.
I can be patient, waiting for you,
'cause I have eternity.


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Dum spiro, spero
JP



© Copyright 1999 JP Burns - All Rights Reserved
Nicole
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since 1999-06-23
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Florida
1 posted 1999-07-28 12:46 PM


I like! Very thought provoking, I must say.
Majere
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since 1999-08-18
Posts 32

2 posted 1999-08-20 03:42 PM


This reminded me of the opening scenes in the movie "The Big Chill" - I love the imagery!

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Such is the way to immortality ;)


Nan
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3 posted 1999-08-20 04:06 PM


....and someone really good is certainly worth waiting for...
Colin
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since 1999-06-05
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Callington, Cornwall, England
4 posted 1999-08-20 05:01 PM


OH WOW!
WOW WOW WOW!
erm *slapping self*
powerful indeed. Like Nan says....
and someone really good is certainly worth waiting for

Yep, this is one I can relate to JP, BIG STYLE

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I believe in fairy tales but then I'm just a silly romantic, what do I know?

Sunshine
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5 posted 1999-08-20 05:04 PM


I've always thought that it would be wonderful if we could watch our own funeral. Now, you've put it into words. Well done, Sir!

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Sunshine
Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow



passing shadows
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6 posted 2004-04-18 04:25 AM


sweet thought-provoking write
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