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Where is he - my mental excitement?
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas 
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Star above shine down upon me Let me wish upon thee - All your magic - all your mystery Let me wish upon thee... Where is he who'll fill that space Deep within my secret place ? Pain is etched beneath my face and deep within my secret place... If only I could hold you tight our love would feel so right -- To possess your soul for just one night - My mind - you do excite...... ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
This is nice...and wistful. Have you ever read Emily Dickinson? Your use of dashes puts me in mind of her work. Here's an excerpt of a lovely one: 'Wild nights - Wild nights Were I with thee wild nights should be Our luxury! Futile the winds- to a heart in port Gone with the compass! Gone with the chart!" It's a shame but I can't remember the last verse! What a great poet you are. |
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blueloon Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 161NY |
Your words created a musical pattern in my head as I read aloud. Very thoughtful way of provoking thought. blueloon ------------------ To give yourself keeps yourself still, And you must live, drawn by your own sweet skill. -shakespeare |
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angel girl Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 322within a whisper... |
Severn, I love Emily Dickinson. She is my favorite poet. I have probably read at least half of her poems, and even memorized some. However, the one you mentioned seems to have escaped me. I don't think I've ever heard it. Thanks for sharing that excerpt from it. FemmeFatale, Severn is right- your work does resemble that of Emily Dickinson's. That is truly a great compliment. That is what I long for- to write like Emily. Great job! |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Blah blah blah.....I read this poem again, and find myself still blabbering away like a fool for a man ! Please tell me I'm not the only silly female who has wasted many a day doing that !!!?? Good thing I have "hobbies & interests" now !! LOL ------------------ I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
PFF You are certainly not! Unfortunately there are many of us out here "who has wasted many a day..." Enjoyed the read ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
pFF, The last line last stanza maybe My body to delight? hehehe Nice poem your one of my favorites |
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traveler Member
since 1999-08-17
Posts 119 |
Another lovely poem Femme ... most are strong enough to stand alone ...yet, male or female we yearn for someone to complete that other half ... to share the things we live in this life ... thanks for all of your prose ... such lovely gifts to share ... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
PFF: If you are a silly female for wasting time wishing, you're certainly not alone!!!  Well done! |
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U K Hero Member
since 1999-08-08
Posts 266England |
Now this I liked. Do not criticise yourself too much, It was well thought out. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
May your thoughts be ever impregnated.....and nothing else. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Wonderful work, PFF..haven't most of us spent time yearning for someone? Exellently done. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* I see the world through the loving eyes of my heart, and suffer the pain of unfulfilled visions. -- Daniel L. Miller |
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