Open Poetry #1 |
Misconceptions |
DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
What's the greatest wonder in your life, the thing you treasure the most? Could it be your lover or your wife, that you raise a glass to toast? I knew I loved her when we first met, such a shy and gentle thing. My wife knew and did not get upset, over her my latest fling. Her mother watched with a careful eye, as I held her in my arms. Her love I accepted with a sigh, she bewitched me with her charms. She smiles at me with sparkling eyes, each time I whisper her name. I promised her there would be no lies, if she vowed to me the same. With her my life was turned upside down, and sent spinning in a whirl. I want you to know this before you frown, I speak of my baby girl. ©1999 DreamEvil ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Dream, I think this is the most precious piece you have ever written. The bond between father and daughter is absolutely beautiful! You've captured the beauty of it very well. ------------------ ~onevoice~ "I never kissed somebody so that they would break my heart." |
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Gentle Soul Member
since 1999-07-12
Posts 273Vinton,Ohio USA |
Thats so sweet!!! *hugs* I love it brother.. *giggles* ------------------ Gënt£ë¤§°û£ |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
i am duly impressed...didn't know you had such sweetness in you ------------------ If I had my mouth I would bite. If I had my liberty I would do my liking. In the mean time, let me be that I am, and seek not to alter me. ~~~Shakespeare~~~ |
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Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
extremely sweet....a lovely piece, Dream. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "I will sail my vessel 'till the river runs dry, like a bird upon the wind, these waters are my sky..." Garth Brooks |
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azblond Senior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 637The Steamy Desert |
Dream...forget all the times I said that "this is my fav"...THIS touched my heart, warmed my soul, and made me love you more than ever before. WellDone! ------------------ For sometimes when the Darkness falls, we must surrender, take what is ours, and give what we can, and always remember love is somewhere waiting... |
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leelew Member
since 1999-07-10
Posts 89highmount,ny,usa |
Awwww!!! You have such a wonderful gentle side.I loved this!! |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Bit unsure about posting this and the companion story, vulnerability isn't my favorite thing. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
A Wonderful, Wonderful piece!! And what a great tribute to the love of a father. Your daughter is lucky! ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
You have such a versatile talent. You can go from writing dark and scarey, to writing about love in so many special ways. I admire your brilliant abilities. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
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Kelly Member
since 1999-07-03
Posts 145 |
Great and sweet. |
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Kelly Member
since 1999-07-03
Posts 145 |
Great and sweet. |
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