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Marigolds.. |
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Mark R. Member
since 1999-06-25
Posts 113San Francisco, CA. |
As a child.... There was a place I liked to hide. As a man.... Someone in whom I could confide. As a child.... A place to run through unbound and free. As a man.... A person whom I would've loved to see. As a child.... Looking left and right at the marigolds around. As a man.... Memories of being held and comforted without a sound. As a child.... It had always been a place of delight. As a man.... Recurring dreams of life in the moonlight. As a child.... Puzzled as mother cried and stayed. As a man.... Understanding it was where father laid. There within the marigolds..... |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
touching...eloquent...great form...Welcome Mark  ------------------ one night at the airport...Childhood Memories...eight short weeks...Music to my Ears...your countenance...just watching tv...hoarse whispers...My One and Only...Tribute to M.J....Feel the need?...serving wench...the mistress...stolen hours...Perfection...devotion...Master...apart...plain...chat? |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
I loved the form also, and wow, what an ending - not at all what I expected...Bravo...very nice...I like your style of writing, keep it up! ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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Mark R. Member
since 1999-06-25
Posts 113San Francisco, CA. |
Thank you everyone. It makes me very proud that even a topic such as this one can still get positive feedback. I really appreciate everyones encouragement. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Lovely! There's a soothing, hopeful quality to this. Great job! |
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Ron
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-05-19
Posts 8669Michigan, US |
Mark, would please correct the email address in your profile - it doesn't work and everytime someone replies to your post the notice ends up in my mailbox. Thanks! |
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Mark R. Member
since 1999-06-25
Posts 113San Francisco, CA. |
Sorry about that Ron. I'll correct it right away. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Mark, this is a very touching and sincere poem. I really enjoyed reading it. It's one of those that you read and sit dumbfounded by it's simple brillance. ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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Mark R. Member
since 1999-06-25
Posts 113San Francisco, CA. |
Thank you, hoot. It's one of those poems that's near and dear in my heart. I'm glad you all like it. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
What they said, Mark I loved the way you brought closure to this poem. A clean close is so hard to get in a lot of situations. If a person reads a poem and then goes, "Man!" - that's clean closure. Man! |
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