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Of the moon...... |
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Artur Hawkwing Member
since 1999-06-30
Posts 444USA |
I truly do hope this puts you to sleep! --------------------------------------------- Of the moon...... Of breaking stride, and cold blue stars gleaming, thin gray clouds were halfway covering the pale, dark sky as silvery layers wove round the white orb undying, while above faint night clouds black and gray constantly streamed covering the void, the eternal gap of space, then uprisen slow, the moon halted; like silver rain the moon poured its soul forth and the waters shoon pale and glassy, fish swimming around underwater leaves and the creak that the trees made as the wind deftly made a path through; a pond full of moonlight became an ocean as fireflies danced sparkling in a festoon swirling - twas as having seen a million heavens as in bewildering delight the night flared up, sparkling a million beams of light, as gray cloud pulled free and drifted towards home bound journey endless; and I collapsed on the grass, upon flawless shifting of shadows that haunted my soul in passing, haunted my dreams, and the moon now looked upon me, shooting blind silver arrows piercing my soul and plucking the silver harp melodiously, till tomorrow waketh all souls felled by the moon lullaby. [This message has been edited by Artur Hawkwing (edited 07-26-99).] |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Most excellent job! I really liked this. You used your wording very well. Sounds like an awsome summer night, laying under the stars!!! |
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Artur Hawkwing Member
since 1999-06-30
Posts 444USA |
My utmost favorite thing to do, lying underneath all the gleaming stars of old..... well-captured! And the moon..... |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
All of the different kinds of light and reflections used here makes this a (what else?) brilliant poem. It is well crafted, sir! (I assume shoon is a typo) |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Wow, this was magnificent. |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Ahhh...sweet perfection. Thank you for sharing this! |
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thursdayschild Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 169Houston, Tx. |
Heavenly...thank you for sharing such beauty. |
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Artur Hawkwing Member
since 1999-06-30
Posts 444USA |
It makes me feel good, all you have said.... thank you! *blush*  Balladeer, sir, shoon is no typo. It's an archaic form of "shone" - writers like Tolkien and Chaucer (my favorites!) have used those..... an example by Chaucer: "Hit was of golde, and shoon so bright," Same way as o'er & ere. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Wow, so very beautiful...I also love laying beneath the stars... ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "I will sail my vessel 'till the river runs dry, like a bird upon the wind, these waters are my sky..." Garth Brooks |
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leelew Member
since 1999-07-10
Posts 89highmount,ny,usa |
Asleep?!? Never!Very nicely written.Well done!! |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
"A pond full of moonlight" .....aahh, this is quite the magical piece, and should cetainly not be WAY back here in forum "dustbunny" land......this piece sparkles so, I say to the top it goes for more rave reviews!!! ------------------ I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale |
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Kelly Member
since 1999-07-03
Posts 145 |
This is great. Thanks for sharing it, |
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