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DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

0 posted 1999-07-23 09:18 PM

We danced that night, under a killing moon.
Inconstant love was our only lament.
In our hearts we knew that dawn comes too soon.
Desperation was all too apparent.

Did I truly tire of this world's demands?
Eyes shining, she asks if I can do it.
She put the cold steel into my hands.
If you love me, she said, you would prove it.

I put the gun to the side of her head.
Smiling for me, she looked up with a sigh.
I pulled the trigger and knew she was dead.
I watched the light of life dim in her eye.

Now I run from myself desperately.
I had not the strength to turn it on me.

©1999 DreamEvil

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Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?
DreamEvil©

~one voice~
Senior Member

since 1999-07-08

Posts 664
Billings, MT USA

1 posted 1999-07-23 09:47 PM

For a first try, this is absolutely beautiful love! Keep it up!

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~onevoice~

"I never kissed somebody so that they would break my heart."

Alwye

Moderator

Member Elite

since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

2 posted 1999-07-23 09:58 PM

dark and disturbing....but a great job, Dream!

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*Krista Knutson*

"It's a crazy thing, fate has perfect wings..."-Deanna Carter

Lost Dreamer
Member Elite

since 1999-06-20

Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow

3 posted 1999-07-23 10:30 PM

Startling, but very good. You have a wonderful talent.

IsabelleSkye
Member

since 1999-06-27

Posts 253

4 posted 1999-07-23 11:22 PM

Oh my! Well I must be honest...this was too scary for me

But WOW it packs a powerful punch!
*shivering*
Izzy

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"I would rather sit on a pumpkin, and have it all to myself,
than to be crowded on a velvet cushion."
.....Henry David Thoreau

Gentle Soul
Member

since 1999-07-12

Posts 273
Vinton,Ohio USA

5 posted 1999-07-24 12:41 PM

wow... sad..

it is good tho..

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Gënt£ë¤§°û£

wayoutwalt
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

6 posted 1999-07-24 12:44 PM

woah sh**ola good damn stuff

elvira
Senior Member

since 1999-07-06

Posts 936
California

7 posted 1999-07-24 02:24 AM

assisted suicide...very controversial topic

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If I had my mouth I would bite.
If I had my liberty I would do my liking.
In the mean time, let me be that I am, and seek not to alter me. ~~~Shakespeare~~~

Blackdrake
Member

since 1999-07-23

Posts 83
Depends on the day :)

8 posted 1999-07-24 03:48 AM

Very dark and forbooding.
I like it.

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Thy own Darkness shall conquer the Light

Dragon
Member

since 1999-07-14

Posts 138
Highmount,NY ,USA

9 posted 1999-07-24 11:49 AM

Dark and beautiful.I loved it!

DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

10 posted 1999-07-24 03:06 PM

I'm glad someone appreciates reality as opposed to fantasy.

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